Economic cycle is a common feature in a capitalist society. When countries struggle with their finances, they are forced to reduce their costs in order to control their balance of payments. Education is one of the most affected areas when the country has a tight budget. Therefore, school board members must decide which fields of education are their top priorities. Many people assume that physical education should be the first class to be cut down. Personally, I believe that arts and music should be the ones to have its funding reduced. I support this opinion for two mains reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Being active is fundamental for our lives. General guidelines suggest that we should be in activity between 3 to 5 times a week. Having a physical education classes at school is important because it can help supply these guidelines. Sometimes parents are not aware of it or do not have the time to take their children to an extracurricular activity; so, their children may lack of physical activities. For example, when I was in middle-school I had soccer classes every day in my curriculum; thus, I was able to keep up with the physical activity guidelines. Soccer was a very enjoyable activity for me, and I was only able to practice at school since there was no fields near where I lived.
Secondly, art and music are easily reachable on your own. Many cities offer music concerts or have art museums. Even if you are not able to go to these places, there are a myriad of ways to access all sort of these contents, such as the usage of the internet, books, music tapes, and many others. Being an art aficionado, I have always learned the history of the art through books on my free time. Even without a class at my school, I was able be very knowledgeable at the topic. On the contrary, I would not be able to do the same with my soccer classes.
In conclusion, I think physical education classes should be always available at schools, even when there is a reduction in school funding. Keeping up with physical activity guidelines is very important, and frequently it is very challenging to do on your own as opposed to arts and music.
- Reading is more educational than watching television or movies. 66
- Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote. 70
- When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why? 70
- Financial plan 73
- Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 634, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I will explore in the following essay. Being active is fundamental for our live...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...able to go to these places, there are a myriad of ways to access all sort of these con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, sort of, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6875 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66987416962 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528645833333 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8137596286 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7142857143 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348885418443 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104262948181 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921279423388 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219826401633 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559585778433 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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