Education, the foundation of a quality of life, has been valued and even triggered a heated discussion over whether multi-tasking hinders students’ learning. Surfing internet and listening to music while studying, in some people’s perspective, prove to be ineffective. Contrary to those people’s opinion is my view that doing other things such as surfing internet and listening to music can contribute positively to students’ learning both academically and psychologically.
What must be prioritized is that browsing internet during study is beneficial to students’ learning by offering more information and developing their information technology skills. To begin with, surfing internet enables students to obtain a large quantity of knowledge and information during the learning process. In detail, students can search for a wide range of knowledge in language, history, and arts through internet; in contrast, , students’ knowledge base must be restricted if they are forbidden to get access to internet when studying alone. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of surfing internet to developing students’ information technology skills. To explain further, when students use internet to assist their learning, their information technology skills, highlighted in 21st century, can be fostered significantly; on the other hand, this critical skill can never be developed if students always study independently in an old-fashioned way.
What should be equally worth discussing is that listening to soft music while studying can contribute to students’ learning outcomes by raising concentration as well as releasing pressure and anxiety. Initially, it is well acknowledged that when provided with soft background music, students will be more concentrated on their tasks. To be specific, if students listen to background music, they will not be disturbed by the environmental noise and can be fully immersed in their work; however, they might be easily distracted and disrupted by others if they study without music. Additionally, it is the soothing music that releases students’ anxiety and pressure during study. To elaborate, listening to music could make the learning process more relaxing and less anxious as students may frequently suffer from learning anxiety and pressure in their academic work, which is proved to inhibit academic performances significantly; otherwise, those who are not accompanied with reassuring melody must easily generate anxiety and pressure while they are performing academic activities.
Not only can students benefit from surfing internet during study, but also they can learn more efficiently with soft music. To conclude, doing other things like surfing internet and listening to music impose beneficial impact on learning.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and arts through internet; in contrast, , students’ knowledge base must be restri...
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Line 3, column 947, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an old-fashioned way" with adverb for "old-fashioned"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... if students always study independently in an old-fashioned way. What should be equally worth discus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, in contrast, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80778588808 4.8611393121 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10933887904 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506082725061 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.3901440935 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.133333333 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229570823536 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974498922106 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048628662997 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163014634726 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208081299933 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 58.1214874552 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.71 10.9000537634 153% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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