With the down of humanity, human beings have done a quite many attempts to eleiminate poverty from the society however, this desire has remained yet to be achieved. On that ground, the government is said to be responsible to provide them a findamental standard of life and be a back bone for them financially. In this reagrd, a plethora of people possesses the conviction that olders should be supported financially while others look this concept through a different lens. They contend that governemnt should support families who have young children or workers who have lost their jobs. Certianly, from my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite reason to be mentiones is that even though the government has extensive crucial responsibilities to look for in the country, oldres are at the peak for neccesity for financial help. This is mainly because they are not financial independant citizens, and even if they want to work and be an independent, their fragile health would not support them to work like other youngesters. Beside, their savings might be all used up within few years, and consequently, they do not left with any saving if they live longer. Indeed, considering all these circumstences, the government should sincerely take step to provide financial help to old age human beings. To shed more light on this, my country’s example is utterly a compelling example of what has been elaborated above. The government in my country, have come up with retirement plan last year whereby every senior citizens are able to received $2000 each month in order to meet with their basic requirements. What is more, they get their health treatments in free of cost anywhere in the government hospitals. Thus, it is judicious to say that life of older people would be really peasant if the government take steps to support them financially.
Another noteworthy point striking in my mind is that helping to seniors will indirectly beneficial to the government itself. To be more specific, people work progressively if they have motivations in the life. In other words, if olders are provided retirement perks and pension benefits, it would indirectly encourage and enforce young individuals to at their best efficiency to serve their own’s contry since they will be benefited during their retirement lives by the government where they live in. On the contrary, in opposite scenario, it is likely that young crown would migrate to other countries in order to take senior citizen perks, and the country have to lose their brilient people. A date statistics collected from empirical study that is conducted at the University of California indicates that approximately 78% young individiuals of Egypt migrated to the United States last years due the fact that they did not find getting any benefits once they become senior citizen. Ultimately, this enforces me that providing fund to old people is singificant in order to motivate young generation to work for the country life-long.
To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that some may not agree with my viewpoint, I implicitly believe that eleders deserve to be helped financially. This is becasue it is hard for them to work at this age, and apaprently, it provide boost up to young folk to work hard for their own country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 258, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...to work at this age, and apaprently, it provide boost up to young folk to work hard for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, may, really, so, thus, while, in other words, in spite of, on the contrary, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2933.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16373239437 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84032896549 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529929577465 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 894.6 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0556630426 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.318181818 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229948582702 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706337682339 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576309044806 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147892712335 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412232002718 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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