Which one do you think is important to long-lasting friendship?
1. Help you when you need
2. Share same interest and hobby
3. mutual trust
To begin with, knowing the same interest for long-lasting friendship would provide people with a lot of talking materials. It is significant for people to make a strong bond with others through conversations. For example, in school, people have to introduce themselves either in a group or in front of a classroom. Then, they try to introduce their interest, major, and family structures, and so on. If people cannot find out the same interest with them while listening to the talks, it is not enough for them to attract others to be a long-lasting friendship. Therefore, it is momentum for people to attain an opportunity to know the corresponding interest with others.
Secondly, what people hang out with others who establish the same interest produces an impact on their long-lasting friendship. The best way for people to enhance the possibility of long-lasting friendship is to go out anywhere with each other. Thus, they gain more situations to know about others. Moreover, the same interest and hobbies would be a lure to hang out with each other because they can go to places where they can implement their hobbies such as reading books, playing sports, and going shopping, and so on.
Finally, the easy invitation to people who procure the same interest increases the possibility of being long-lasting friendship. When people ponder whether they invite others who have the same interest to hang out or others considering their hobbies are unfamiliar with them, they definitely select the friends sharing the same hobbies. If they have to hang out with others unrelated to their hobbies, it is difficult for them to enjoy shopping and driving in their deep emotion. They may be reluctant to playing games and sports they do not like. As a result, it is easy for people who want to construct a long-lasting relationship with others to figure out the related interest.
To sum up, it is the best way for people to gather same hobbies with others in order to earn long-lasting relationship. I surely believe that they can boost a bunch of topics in conversation, go out to the associated place for their interest with each other, and easily ask others to go out.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... their hobbies are unfamiliar with them, they definitely select the friends shari...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94005449591 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81531919497 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460490463215 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8769906833 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.647058824 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138385436531 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648793006571 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529884522836 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105434289691 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207767159996 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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