It is apparent that people confront various difficulties in their daily activities. It is very important for them to manage themselves in order to solve these problems as soon as possible. In this regard, a controversy might arise to whether it is better to solve the issues alone or with interaction with others. Although both of these opinions have their loyal advocates, I highly tend to the latter option with two compelling reasons, which I will elucidate in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, working with others enables each member of a group to become familiar with different perspectives of a specific issue. These various ideas deal with the problems from different viewpoints and consequently makes the solutions more accurate and comprehensive. Take a personal experience as an example. I work as a planning expert in Iran railway company. Last year our manager decided to classify my colleagues and me to various specialized groups in order to analyze the potential ways of increasing labor productivity. At the end of the year, the annual survey showed that our department became one of the top ones in our corporate. needless to say that had we not been engaged in groups, we wouldn’t have gained that excellent result.
The other rationale behind this idea is rooted in the fact that working in pairs not only leads individuals to the optimal solution more quickly but also helps each person to improve some of his social attributes. these days, a host of parents think that their children are not socialized enough and ask schools to run effective programs to address their concerns. In my case, I used to be a shy person when I was studying at high school. Working with my classmates gave me a chance to boost my self-confidence. I also learned how to defend my idea to persuade others and trained to accept rational consultants proposed by my friends. This education environment completely changed my personality to an extraverted student.
To put it into a nutshell, although some people think that their performances get increased when they work alone, I deeply believe that working in a group not only enhances the solution quality but also enables individuals to eliminate some of their personality weaknesses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09264305177 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95015726646 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604904632153 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9565484926 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.833333333 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3888888889 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10162998988 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311420758858 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0224036393493 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.058897048785 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116887143612 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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