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Throughout history, the emergence of television has been always considered as a huge milestone. TV programs have both advantages and drawbacks for human. Not only people can benefit from watching advantageous programs and documentaries, but also they can attain some negative habits form what they watch. Here comes a controversial dilemma, whether TV program should show that good people are rewarded, as well as bad people are punished, all the time, to teach something to the audience or not. I personally believe that although showing these scenes can be useful in some rare situations, it is not necessary for producers to create TV shows and movies base on this issue. There are other ways to fabricate the script of a movie in order for the audience to achieve some positive points. The following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, without a shadow of doubt, Although no one can underestimate that praising a good person, and on the other hand, punishing a bad person such as a killer can have good results occasionally, TV shows can teach mortality and people's right through some indirect ways as well. By the way of example, sometimes harmful and sad scenes can elevate the audience awareness about character's right in a story. People become emotional and try to realize the situation of each character and things that are happening to him, as a result, the audience may become curious and intrusive about laws and rights that are responsible for one's position in a criminal accident, thereby try to put themselves instead of the pointed character to feel whether he is having his real rights or bad people are deceiving the judges. In this way, people may learn some important rules and can benefit from what they see in their future life.
Another equally important reason I would like to bring here is that, if movies always show everything is fine in the society; for instance, bad people are punished because of what they have done, then people feel free of thinking about their own rights. They try to adopt themselves to the circumstances rather that working hard to achieve their real rights and therefore, nothing is going to change whereas they can make their society a better place to live in. Take a historical occurrence as an example, before the industrial revolution, the women who lived in my country, felt they were free whereas they were not. They did not have a complete information because all the time they saw TV series fabricated by the government, in which characters did not have any problems and they lived happily ever after, rather than useful movies to help them heighten their consciousness.
To make long story short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that there are other ways that people can benefit more from watching TV rather than just watch movies with the concept that was enumerated above. However, that was a story in a nutshell; actually there are other reasons and examples challenging this claim that are not mentioned above due to dearth of time. All in all, it is suggested that producers make movies that can help people increase their awareness about their own situation and give them the knowledge and ability to fight for a better society
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
...ut history, the emergence of television has been always considered as a huge milestone. TV prog...
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Line 2, column 637, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...aws and rights that are responsible for ones position in a criminal accident, thereb...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'whereas', 'for instance', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'by the way', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211314475874 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.171381031614 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0865224625624 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.063227953411 0.046263068375 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0515806988353 0.0685040099705 75% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118136439268 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0366056572379 0.0351676179071 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62637171457 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0332778702163 0.0309702414327 107% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0981697171381 0.0887237588012 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0249584026622 0.0209618222197 119% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0166389351082 0.0139019557991 120% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3278.0 2387.08602151 137% => OK
No of words: 553.0 408.028673835 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92766726944 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356238698011 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254972875226 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.179023508137 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.121157323689 0.112833075102 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62637171457 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515370705244 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 63.2735448887 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.7222222222 20.5533526081 149% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.9625082659 48.84282405 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.111111111 120.699889404 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7222222222 20.5533526081 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 56.2195097448 45.7405998639 123% => OK
Elegance: 1.27906976744 1.45489161554 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112136078488 0.103427244359 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0684847589656 0.0752933317313 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503344698487 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145126594254 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.404509378595 0.336927656856 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0623813533866 0.067059652881 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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