You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
Many people believe that the world experience a turning point in financial in recent years, so studies issue about investment have extensively been reviewed the lasts decades. Consider choosing between either purchasing a house or doing business. It poses a dilemma. While some people believe that buying a property is a savvy choice, others find running a small business a more compelling decision. In my opinion, investment in running a new business is better than buying a house. In the following, this point of view will be illustrated for two reasons.
First, the goal of each dealing is to maximize profit, and if someone tolerates a hard condition of starting, he would be rewarded many times of his effort. Although launching a new business activity is demanding and needs spending a lot of energy and time, it finally yields more interest as the original investment increases many times. As an example, imagine that the original investment for a prosperous company was equal to an average home in a town, but now that initial investment was equal to the value of a hundred modern houses. It would undoubtedly be a great asset.
Second, each patriotic human prefers to act in the way which has benefit for his country. By purchasing a business, many young people could find a job, and the country's economy would accelerate. Acting in this way, in addition to the fortifying country economy, citizen welfare improve either. For instance, in the tough day after World War II, American patriotic people decided to launch a small business like cultivating vegetables and other plants to sell them. As a result, the USA did not experience a significant shortage, and many people could find a job in those fields, generating a thriving economy.
For all the reasons mentioned above, whether you seek more profit or like to help your country’s economy, running a new business is a wiser and more satisfying decision.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01869158879 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7592313766 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601246105919 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1401449001 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.6875 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136223142299 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449863330629 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622940447971 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0772656714505 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389034653722 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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