Needless to say, no one can do what he wants if he has not enough money and it is obvious that financial problems are the biggest obstruct in achieving to dreams. The way that we spend our money is different from one person to another. However, as so far as I am concerned, if I have sufficient amount of money, I will buy the tickets for the concert. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explain in this essay.
The first and the most prominent reason that comes to my mind is that the concert may not be available in another day. Regardless of some singers who are not noticeably famous, popular artists have concerts just in a few days of a year. In no account would I miss this opportunity to buy the tickets for my favorite singer’s concert and wait for the next time that is not predictable when it is. For example, I am a fan of Beatles band and try to collect their all albums. Because of my countries problems, the concerts are not prevalent here. Nevertheless, I was abroad last year and the Beatles had a concert in that country luckily. I was delighted and wanted to buy the tickets but there was no ticket available and I could not buy any ticket. I missed this opportunity and do not know when is the next time that the Beatles come to that country again. Consequently, I will buy the tickets this time because I do not know whether will be another concert soon or not.
Secondly, the second reason is the joyfulness and the pleasure. Never anyone ever cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of fun and happy times in their life. the concerts make individuals excited and helps to enjoy their time. For instance, my father is not a fan of music and hardly does he listen to a song. He prefers to hear the news and be aware of the world’s changes. On the contrary, my mother loves music and goes to the concerts every week. Once that he had bought tickets for a concert, one of his friends had and cold and was not able to go to that concerts. My brother persuaded my father to be with him at that concert and my father surprisingly accepted. They had an unforgettable night and enjoyed excessively. After that night, my father asks my brother to take him to the all the concerts that he goes. As a result, the concerts are very exciting and joyful.
To put in the nutshell, I personally prefer to buy the tickets for the concert. The concerts are very pleasant and delightful and they are usually annual.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Never' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...son is the joyfulness and the pleasure. Never anyone ever cast a shadow of doubt on t...
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Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...e of fun and happy times in their life. the concerts make individuals excited and h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38325991189 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5383854718 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482378854626 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3233652265 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.5384615385 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4615384615 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149844760865 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438536413463 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445317224437 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106918782504 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415607728747 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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