According to the Cambridge dictionary, the word enjoy means to take delight or pleasure in an activity or occasion. It is not mandatory that both young and old people derive pleasure out of the same things or activities in their lives. While most young people are energetic and agile in comparison to the older people, it does not necessarily mean that older people enjoy their life any less than the younger ones do. Therefore, I disagree with the statement that young people enjoy their life more than old people do. To support my statement, I offer the following examples:
1. My grandparents and most of their friends within the same age group relish their time spent together with family and friends. While on a vacation, they enjoy a more relaxed atmosphere. On the other hand, younger kids within our family relish their time playing outdoor games, video games or going to movies. While on a vacation, they enjoy exploring, travelling and adventurous sports. The preferences here are different for each age group, but everyone has the best of their time during these occasions.
2. A group of older people within our society enjoy spending their time by involving in various activities such teaching yoga, pottery or even pursuing their expensive hobbies as they are financially stable and have the time and money to do so. Younger kids are not financially stable and do not have the luxury of time, but they do save money to pursue their dream of going on a dream vacation or in buying things they fancy. They have to work very hard to get what they want, but that does not mean they enjoy their life any less than the old people do.
Enjoyment could mean anything from very simple pleasures in life such as laying down in a garden and watching stars to buying a luxury car. It is not a tangible product that can be measured precisely on a scale, or given a grade or value to conclude indisputably that one generation enjoy their life more over another. Everyone enjoys their life in their own ways irrespective of age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, while, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79310344828 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46453239715 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502873563218 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1404336796 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.2 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337458404627 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130558629212 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158949201615 0.0737576698707 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218096781248 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.171505206074 0.0645574589148 266% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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