Life is journey and not a desitination, so it is important to enjoy every aspect of life to its fullest. Some people think that young people enjoy life more than older people do while others don't think so. According to me older people enjoy life more than young people for the follwoing reasons.
Older people have time to spend with their family and friends. Nowadays young people are so much busy that even they don'have time to spend with their family. On the other hand older people spend quality time with their family members and they enjoy every moment of it. For example, when I was kid, my gradma took care of me because both of my parents were working. She used to take care of me, play with me and took me to playgrounds and zoos. When I came from the school she used to be there to welcome me with a big smile. Every night she used to tell me story about her life. She went to meet his friends and used to have long conversation with them.She always seemed happy to me. Contrary, my mom and dad look were exhausted when they came from the office. I never saw them happy as much as my grandma was. Old people understand importance of life and enjoy every bit of it with their closest one.
Second, older people have free time to invest in various activities. Young people get free time mostly on weekends but since they are exhausted and tired due to job and other activities they are relcutant to do things which they want to do. While old people wants to invest their time doing constcutive things and enjoy it. For example, again my grandma used to spend her time in learning music in which she was interested while she was young but didn't have time to do so. She joined music classes and even she taught me about it. She was so passionate about learning that she never missed the class.
In sum, older people enjoy more than young people. Because they have time to spend with family members and doing the things which they are not able to do when they were young.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, second, so, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39945652174 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.02126974156 2.67179642975 76% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434782608696 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1189103443 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5909090909 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7272727273 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349288292428 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132840574582 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15609984752 0.0737576698707 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306207140425 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170268804658 0.0645574589148 264% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.32 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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