Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of
two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice,
and why?
o A major that would allow him to finish years of study
and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work
full-time quickly). Or
o A major that requires many years of study that would
provide him with more employment opportunities and
offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples
to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain
examples.
Without any shadow of doubt, academic stdudies play a prominent role in the lives of those who want to achieve great job opportunities. Although some people might believe that it is good for people to study just for getting a degree and then immidiately go for finding jobs, others possess the idea that individuals should continue their study in university and be hired as an fine employment. As far as I am concerned, getting a higher degree is esential to find fantastic job opportunities. I will elaborate on my reasoning through the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account that having higher education means knowing more about the major. All universities hire professors to help students learn about their field of study better. The higher education is, the deeper knowledge about the subject will be. Professors assign a lot of projects to students which teaches them to work hard, and as a result, they will be prepared for actual jobs. For instance, a recent study in a university in Norway asserts that people with higher education are more efficient in their jobs. This survey has studied employees’ opperaations in a well-known company for four years. The results are attention-taking: those workers who had a university degree upper bachleror, had about 23% better understanding of the tasks they were responsible for, and could make wise decisions just in time. Additionally, the company was happy with its choice for having thoe graduates as employees.
The second reason I would like to mention is that spending few more years to elevate the degree in one’s major has some social benefits. It is undeniable that people with high university degrees are more respected in society and have more self-confidence. Take a personal experience as an example: back to the time I had finished my master’s degree, I decided to drop academic studies and started to looking for job opportunities. After some time of searching and going to job interviews, I found out I could have more professional job titles and a much better salary, if I had a Ph.D degree. I realized the field I wanted to work in was very competative and I was not ready yet to be in work place, thus It caused me lack of self-confidence. So, I started studing and did my best to graduate as a tpo student in order to find a respected job.
To bring everything into conclusion, I believe it is a fundamental reqirement for students to try gain higher degrees, so they would have the chance to work in a nice environment. It helps them to be more specilized in their jobs and have high social status in the society in the future. It is commonly believe that training and eedcation are just a suitable investment in one’s abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...eir study in university and be hired as an fine employment. As far as I am concern...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ty degree upper bachleror, had about 23% better understanding of the tasks they w...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: D
...and a much better salary, if I had a Ph.D degree. I realized the field I wanted t...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'believed'.
Suggestion: believed
...e society in the future. It is commonly believe that training and eedcation are just a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88461538462 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97704405279 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523504273504 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2319401523 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.857142857 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121015708977 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376225401344 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041644994543 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734222828806 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0207519701002 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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