Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Without any shadow of doubt, communication plays a prominent role in every individual’s life. Although some people might believe that being away from others reminds us of their value in our lives, others possess the conviction that we should stay close to them, so we could possess a good relationship by having more communication with them. As far as I am concerned, I think in order to having a functional relationship with others, it is required to be in touch with them by communicating more often. I will elaborate on my reasons through the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take inro account that by practicing more communiction skills, people get more skilled in building constructive relationships. It is generally accepted that people experience changes both emotionally and bahaviorally. If we care about having others in our lives, we must allocate enough time and energy to be more social and communicative. This is essentional not only for constructing a parctical relationship with others, but also showing them how omportant they are in our environmet. Take a personal experience as an example: back to the time I was going to college in another city, I had some close friends that I imagined we will be best friends for ever. Yet, by me leaving my home town, I got a part time job and different classes in college , so I was too much busy. As a result, I could not be in touch with my old friends in home. Thus after a year I came back home, all of them were obset with me, even some of them had new friends by then. It was a rough time for me to realize that I should have been more considerate about my relationships bacause they need caring and nurturing to stay alive!
The second reason I would like to mention is that we learn from each other and go through a path that leads us to be more mature and developed personally. Commnication is like a circle which reconsolidates itself. By being more time with people, we learn how to be more tolerant facing different ideas, to react properly in stressful situations, to share our experiences with others, and accept the fact that as we notice others’ changes, we are changing too. It is a dynamic system which helps us to rely on each other and survive.
To bring everything into account, I am of the view that individuals could use the benefits of having a nice relationship with others by communicating more due to the fact that it helps us to be more skilled in playing roles in human interactins, and it assists us to catch up with others’ emotional and behavioral changes. I recommend everybody reconsider the way they are communicating with others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...et, by me leaving my home town, I got a part time job and different classes in college , ...
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Line 2, column 774, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ime job and different classes in college , so I was too much busy. As a result, I ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e in touch with my old friends in home. Thus after a year I came back home, all of t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le which reconsolidates itself. By being more time with people, we learn how to b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, thus, as to, even so, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73866090713 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96796898951 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518358531317 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.3326585667 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.888888889 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7222222222 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376498254061 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106966008094 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110057354671 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247496904153 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811513662512 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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