your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does
Nowadays, along with the acceleration of social development, people are confronted with unprecedentedly fierce competition. They need to work very hard to guarantee a decent life, which causes them way heavier pressure than before. Recently, A heated argument on it’s our job or life that bring more impact to our happiness has draw much attention. Some people believe that our job is key to our happiness which others hold that our social life closely associate with our happiness. I’m incline to the latter, social life after daily work is more impactful to our happiness than our job.
First, our social life can help us find our where our true interest lies. Emphasis should be placed on what has been suggested in the famous saying “interest is the best teacher”. Interest might even feedback to our work positively because I believe that the primary step toward a person’s success is to find an emotional preference. In fact, interest constitutes the biggest impetus in learning, working, and happiness. For example, Charles Darwin is famous for his masterpiece entitled on the Origin of Species. His interest in nature led him to quit his medical studies at the University of Edinburgh and explore natural science instead. Further education at Cambridge continued to evoke his passion for natural science. At last, his efforts paid off and achieve glorious accomplishment in his work. This example perfectly indicates the importance of our social life to our happiness.
Second, social life is able to help us with reducing pressure, especially work pressure. Taking watching movies as an example, it’s conducive to soothing our minds whenever we feel stressed. According to a well-known theory advanced in the twentieth century, humans hava a gift of fantasy, through which they seek to reshape realities into more satisfying forms than those encountered in daily life. Thus, fantasy, of which movie is one form, permits people to objectify their anexities and fears, confront them, and fulfill their hopes in fiction if not fact. The film is the tool whereby people define and understand their world or escape from unpleasant realities. Therefore, our social life is vital in pursuing our fantasy to seek advanced happiness while it’s impossible to taste it through our job.
Finally, doing a volunteer job, for instance engaging in a environment protect group, brings much more happiness than our daily work. To illustrate, environmental protection is closely bound up with the health of every single person living in this world. Moreover, health is fundamental to our happiness. If the environment is polluted, the basic elements people need to survive, such as air and water, are also affected, and might lead to disastrous results. Therefore, social life such as environmental protection volunteering definitely affects our happiness more compared to our job.
In conclusion, my point of view that social life has more effect on our happiness than our job does is clearly justified through the reasons and examples discussed above.
- Agnostids 85
- Agree or disagree it s better to Chose a university whose graduates have good job opportunities than a university who has famous professors 80
- salvage logging 68
- Spartacus the rebel leader who fought against the Romans with an army of fellow escaped slaves is one of the most famous figures in ancient Roman history Spartacus led his men against their Roman oppressors and managed to defeat the Roman army in several 78
- your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does 83
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2580.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27607361963 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77553558077 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560327198364 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2021487958 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2307692308 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8076923077 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181234233593 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583831212136 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740476673226 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141253464027 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752550206298 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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