As technology is advancing, people are getting inclined to it, so they have to know how to use it or deal with the problems they face. From my point of view, my school has to purchase computers, so as to make students accomplish their assignments in as short time, and in addition to teach them how to keep up with technology in their future. I hold this opinion for 2 main reasons, which I will list below.
To begin with, I would like to elucidate the fact that computers are more useful tool for searching information rather than books. Computers entail dozens of information and indeed it is very easy to access them in contrast with book, which encompasses a lot of excess information, and besides they usually are not appropriate for appointments. Thus, there is a high possibility of finding certain information in computer comparing to book. For instance, you are searching for certain formula in math book, but there are plenty of useless information for your homework, so you will waste your time and perhaps not even get what you want. On the other hand, when you are searching for formula in internet you merely type the name you want, and you acquire that instantly.
In addition, according to scientific research, it has been evident that indeed students have tremendous propensity towards sitting on the front of computers for long hours, searching information rather than to do the same with book, which is often considered tedious among students. Actually it is due to their psychology, which makes them to presume that they find information effortless, which leads them to have knowledge about specific topic in a very short and broad way.
In conclusion, I would like to accentuate very vital point that 21st century is century of technology, which demands high interest and ability to utilize technology, so we have to teach it to students from earlier ages otherwise it is going to become problematic for them in the future.
- The world’s forests are facing increasing pressure which, if left unchecked, will threaten the health of many industries, economies, nations, and lives. The development of an international fund to help developing countries implement useful conservation 81
- Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why? 66
- Your school has enough money to purchase either computers for students or books for the library. Which should your school choose to buy - computers or books? Use specific reasons and examples to support your recommendation 75
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, if, so, thus, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88855421687 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72082999844 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.2754508596 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.545454545 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1818181818 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.45110844103 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241748412268 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903177304629 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538455943265 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122198673198 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642034838387 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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