The lecture completely refutes the passage. It is said in the lecture that, the perceived acts of altruism are nothing more than sneaky methods of gaining advantage for one’s self.Contrary to the belief in the passage that sentinels risk their lives for the cause of the whole group, the professor says that the meerkat sentinels are in fact less prone
to outside threats. The alarm sentinels give off causes to group to move rashly which draws the predators attention towards them, thus drawing away the attention from
the sentinels. The lecture refutes the fact that these meerkats are altruistic in the sense that they gain nothing in exchange of their services. In fact, researches have shown that they have a full stomach as they perform this “altruistic” duty and have a better chance of escaping from danger because they witness it ifrst Proffesor also offers a different underlying motivation that causes people to believe that acts such as donating an organ or sharing food with someone in need are altruistic. She says that people gain appreciation as a result of such acts, which may be deemed by some much more important than materialistic gains.
- Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals Altruism is the opposite of selfishness individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves Examples of altruism 80
- Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals Altruism is the opposite of selfishness individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves Examples of altruism 76
- Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people 60
- Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals Altruism is the opposite of selfishness individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves Examples of altruism 80
- The comics medium includes newspaper comic strips such as Dennis the Menace and comic books such as Spider Man Scholars around the world agree that comics are a uniquely American art form The first commercially successful comic strip was Hogan s 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Contrary
...ods of gaining advantage for one’s self.Contrary to the belief in the passage that senti...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 57, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'grouping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: grouping
...ts. The alarm sentinels give off causes to group to move rashly which draws the predator...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'predators'' or 'predator's'?
Suggestion: predators'; predator's
...to group to move rashly which draws the predators attention towards them, thus drawing aw...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 975.0 1373.03311258 71% => OK
No of words: 194.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02577319588 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61734386232 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628865979381 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 419.366225166 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 21.2450331126 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.837272211 49.2860985944 229% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.5 110.228320801 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3333333333 21.698381199 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140298670304 0.272083759551 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575933221815 0.0996497079465 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506590063218 0.0662205650399 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086429932013 0.162205337803 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499251243487 0.0443174109184 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.3589403974 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 53.8541721854 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 63.6247240618 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.498013245 141% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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