The benefits claimed for electronic medical records are actually every uncertain First the costs savings are unlikely be as significant as the reading suggests For example there probably won t be any savings related to record storage You see doctors who a

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The benefits claimed for electronic medical records are actually every uncertain.First, the costs savings are unlikely be as significant as the reading suggests. For example, there probably won't be any savings related to record storage. You see, doctors who adopt electronic records usually don't throw out or discontinue the paper records. They keep the paper records as an emergency backup or because the paper originals with signatures are needed for legal reasons. So as a result, most doctors who adopt electronic record keeping still have to pay storage costs associated with paper-based record keeping.Second, electronic medical records cannot eliminate the possibility of errors caused by poor handwriting or by mistakes in the transcription of data. That's because most doctors, including those who've adopted electronic medical record keeping, still use pen and paper while examining patients. They take notes and write prescriptions by hand. It's usually the office staff of a doctor who entered this information at a later time from the handwritten documents into electronic systems. So poor handwriting can still lead to errors in the records since the staff members have to interpret what the doctor has written.Third, medical research would not necessarily benefit from electronic record keeping. Researchers will still find it difficult to access and use medical information. That's because access to all medical information is subject to strict privacy laws in the United States. Privacy laws exist to allow patients to keep their medical information private if they wish to. As a consequence, researchers who want to collect data from electronic medical records have to follow strict and complicated procedures and obtain many permissions along the way, including permissions from the patients. And often, such permissions are not granted. For example, patients can block the use of their medical records for any purpose other than their own medical treatment.

According to the reading passage, in the United States, patients' medical information has been traditionally recorded on paper forms and it has been suggested that recording of these data in electronic databases will be more advantageous because of several reasons. However, the professor finds all the ideas uncertain and brings up some evidence to refute them all.
First, using electronic records can properly reduce the cost of storing and transferring the medical records. In contrast, the professor asserts that most of the doctors not only use electronic records, but also keep storing the data by papers and prescriptions for legal purposes and they must pay the cost of storage of paper-based data as well.
Moreover, electronic records can reduce the chances of medical errors which may happen by illegible handwriting or improper transcription of data, etc. On the contrary, the professor underlies that when doctors are examining patients, they use paper and pen and take notes by hand, and then possible errors in prescriptions may enter from handwriting to the computer by staffs in their offices at a later time.
Finally, medical researchers can use these electronic recordings and information for their researchers and they can gather a great amount of classified data from any research location. Conversely, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that medical records of patients are preserved under strict privacy laws and researchers must follow special methods to access the medical records of patients in the United States and to gain permissions from their doctors or even patients. Sometimes patients may block them and do not allow using these recordings other than for their treatment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...professor finds all the ideas uncertain an brings up some evidence to refute them ...
^^
Line 4, column 538, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...atients may block them and do not allow to use these recordings.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 265.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3320754717 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79477211182 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577358490566 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.169602472 49.2860985944 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.0 110.228320801 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4444444444 21.698381199 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3333333333 7.06452816374 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215862811385 0.272083759551 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895114116664 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552746334882 0.0662205650399 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130951276171 0.162205337803 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268583891213 0.0443174109184 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.3589403974 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 53.8541721854 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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