Discusion about validity of Electronic Medical System
Reading ad article talks about advantages of electronic medical system over paper base system. Reading suggests that it is really great idea to replace old methods of preserving medical data. While, lecture claims that electronic medical system benefits are unpredictable. Lecture explores her view by giving reasons.
First, reading states that new modern electronic data system will cut down expense and diminish space for storing patient's data. He also argues medical records can be accessed from any part of the world by the agencies involved in patient's treatment. Lecture casts doubt made on this point made in article. She says that even if with electronic system installed, most doctors use papers to write down prescription and still need to keep signed original documents. She further asserts that new system is not creating any effect of the budget of medical records.
Second, reading claims that chances of blunder are going to diminished by standard digital data.He also points that vague handwriting and non-uniform methods of documentation probably interpret information in incorrect manner and may lead to jeopardise patient's health.
On contrary, lecture refutes this agreement made in reading. She says new electronic system is not preventing this error, as health care workers convert hand written information into digital form. As a result, this system may fail to provide good quality treatment to patients.
Third, author mention that accessible electronic system can make it very easy for the scientist and researchers to gather medical records. He points out that process of obtaining data physically from all agencies involved is very troublesome. Lecture casts doubt on this statement. She thinks that acquiring data from lector system requires permission from doctors and patients, as medical laws are very rigid. In addition, she says that some times patients are not eager to give access to use their medical records. As a consequence, professor successfully casts doubt on methods present in reading.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...old methods of preserving medical data. While, lecture claims that electronic medical...
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Message: 'Going to' requires the base form: 'diminish'
Suggestion: diminish
...ms that chances of blunder are going to diminished by standard digital data.He also points...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
... to diminished by standard digital data.He also points that vague handwriting and ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... system is not preventing this error, as health care workers convert hand written...
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...rt hand written information into digital form. As a result, this system may fail ...
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... system may fail to provide good quality treatment to patients. Third, author ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, really, second, so, still, third, while, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1373.03311258 126% => OK
No of words: 316.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46202531646 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64985117775 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579113924051 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 419.366225166 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0609047344 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8421052632 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6315789474 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269050387528 0.272083759551 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874018313178 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995375933503 0.0662205650399 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153862746219 0.162205337803 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11056623085 0.0443174109184 249% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 63.6247240618 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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