Essay topics: TPO-43 - Integrated Writing TaskAgnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids

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Essay topics: TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task

Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitive arthropods-relatives of modern-day insects. However, the fossil information does not allow paleontologists to determine with certainty what agnostids ate or how they behaved. There are several different theories about how agnostids may have lived.

Free-Swimming Predators

First, the agnostids may have been free-swimming predators that hunted smaller animals. It is known that other types of primitive arthropods were strong swimmers and active predators, so it is reasonable that the agnostids may have lived that way as well And while the agnostids were small, sometimes just six millimeters long, there were plenty of smaller organisms in the ancient ocean for them to prey on.

Seafloor Dwellers

Second, they may have dwelled on the seafloor. Again, there are examples of other types of primitive arthropods living this way, so it is possible that agnostids did too. On the seafloor they would have survived by scavenging dead organisms or by grazing on bacteria.

Parasites

Third, there is the possibility that the agnostids were parasites, living on and feeding off larger organisms. One reason that this seems possible is that there are many species of modern-day arthropods that exist as parasites, such as fleas, ticks, and mites. The agnostids might have lived on primitive fish or even on other, larger arthropods.

The reading passage claims that the Agnostids were a marine animal about 450 million years ago and because there are not any significant fossil records of them, so, it is not simple to clarify the way of eating or the space of they lived. In this way the reading claims that there are three specific reason for possibility of the lifestyle of these creatures. While, the lecturer on the other hand, claims that these three argument are erroneous and she states theses features undoubtedly are not possible for agnostids living situation.

First, the lecture claims that the possibility of being agnostids a free-swimming predators is nearly zero. Because, these modern predators have a incredibly powerful and well developed eyes for chasing the prays while, according to the fossil records, the agnostids had a exceptionally minuscule, tiny eyes which by these eyes they were virtually blind which as one of the consequences they can't find the prays by eye chasing. And maybe there was other chasing mechanism which it is not supported by any evidences, so this supposition is also ridiculous as a scientific prospective.

Secondly, the lecturer refuses the seafloor dwellers assumption and claims that it is wrong reason either. Most primitive arthropods had this way of living and for that they were so slow. Meanwhile, according to the evidenced, they can not go very long distance while the agnostids had a vast geographical area which they can go through it and gathering the foods and moreover as a mater of the fact, they were remarkabely an speady creatures for some specific body statues.

Finally, the speaker is not convinced by the parasites argument in the reading which claims that the modern parasites like fleas, taiks and mites and also the agnostids on the other hand were the same kind. While, as the parasites had a special behavior that they absolutely kill their host, so they have not an abundant population also, they had a lot of different kinds of the parasites. While, the agnostids had a widespread population in one area as the fossile recored show this fact by gathering prolifically remnants of the agnostids in their houses. Conclusively, it can be said that the whole argument of the reading is misleading and it is very crucial that the scientist have an eye on this fact.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'predator'?
Suggestion: predator
...lity of being agnostids a free-swimming predators is nearly zero. Because, these modern p...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...o. Because, these modern predators have a incredibly powerful and well developed ...
^
Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...o the fossil records, the agnostids had a exceptionally minuscule, tiny eyes whic...
^
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...d which as one of the consequences they cant find the prays by eye chasing. And mayb...
^^^^
Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ater of the fact, they were remarkabely an speady creatures for some specific body...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parasites'' or 'parasite's'?
Suggestion: parasites'; parasite's
...ly, the speaker is not convinced by the parasites argument in the reading which claims th...
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Line 7, column 682, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd it is very crucial that the scientist have an eye on this fact.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 387.0 270.72406181 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98708010336 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72904429513 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472868217054 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 419.366225166 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.2411318122 49.2860985944 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.461538462 110.228320801 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7692307692 21.698381199 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371212137793 0.272083759551 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138900296304 0.0996497079465 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658850170636 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23110142003 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117244739909 0.0443174109184 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 53.8541721854 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
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Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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