The reading and the lecture are both about the consumption of wheat by humans in the pre-historic period. The author of the reading believes that bread was the first product produced from wheat. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. She thinks that, in fact, beer was the first product that resulted from wheat production.
First of all, the author claims that early humans prepared wheat for consumption by grinding it between two stones. He notes that wheat was much easier to consume if it was ground to to a thin paste in advance, rather than just being chewed raw. This point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that it was not necessary to grind wheat as it could be sprouted naturally in a moist environment. Furthermore, she points out that sprouted wheat is sweeter, softer and more nutritious than ground wheat.
Secondly, the author states that early humans would have easily discovered how to bake bread by exposing their ground wheat to fire. He argues that baked bread could be stored for long periods of time which would have greatly increased the value of wheat as food. This argument is rebutted by the lecturer. She suggests that humans during this period did not know how to cook food with fire. She notes that applying fire to food in order to make it more palatable was simply not an obvious idea at that time.
Finally, the author mentions that early humans would have noticed the effects of yeast spores landing on the ground wheat paste when it was left out in the open. He is of the opinion that the bubbles that formed when the yeast landed indicated to people that baked bread would be lighter and easier to eat than raw wheat. The lecturer, on the other hand, feels that fermentation happened very quickly when wheat paste was put into storage. She puts forth the idea that the nice taste of the bubbles that formed when fermentation happened would have been more likely to lead to beer production than to bread production.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 243.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3950617284 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24566938561 2.5805825403 126% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617283950617 0.540411800872 114% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 60.0 21.2450331126 282% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.9445501507 49.2860985944 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 327.75 110.228320801 297% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 60.75 21.698381199 280% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.0 7.06452816374 354% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 4.19205298013 620% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130492167528 0.272083759551 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880394251032 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072851980426 0.0662205650399 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880394251032 0.162205337803 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072851980426 0.0443174109184 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.4 13.3589403974 258% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 10.58 53.8541721854 20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 5.55761589404 234% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.7 11.0289183223 242% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.93 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.29 8.42419426049 134% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.7273730684 266% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.0 10.498013245 248% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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