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The professor agree with the lecture that petroleum is a finite resources and also that burning oil cause a lot of pollutions to the environment. She also added that the reading is way to optimistically supporting the replacement of oil fuel cars with the hydrogen-based fuel cells. On the other hand the text totally back up the idea that hydrogen is the perfect replacement for the oil fuel cars in order to solve a lot of problems associated with using oils.

First, the professor explains that hydrogen is not available everywhere ready to use in an internal combustion engine. She added that in order to produce the require hydrogen it needed a lot of special treatment to keep it in a liquid form in a very cold area. However, the text highlights that hydrogen is a good source because it cannot be depleted and it is easily produced from plentiful sources.

Second, the professor asserts that hydrogen fuel car will not solve the pollution made from oil fuel cars, although hydrogen by product is water. The professor explains that in order to produce hydrogen a lot of oil and coal is burning this step cause a lot of pollution to the environment. However, the text affirms that the new hydrogen cars will solve the pollution mad from carbon dioxide as a byproduct from burning oil.

Finally, the professor explains that the new technology is not a cost competitive since the hydrogen fuel cars’ component are made from platinum, which is a rare, very expensive element. She also added that all the effort to replace platinum with a cheaper element wasn't successful. On the other hand, the text assures that the new car will be cheaper because it uses less than half of the fuel that the old car use.

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The professor agree with the lecture
The professor agrees with the lecture

burning oil cause a lot of pollutions
burning oil causes a lot of pollutions

the reading is way to optimistically supporting the replacement
the reading is the way to optimistically support the replacement ???

the text totally back up the idea
the text totally backs up the idea

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 300 250
No. of Characters: 1385 1200
No. of Different Words: 132 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.617 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.708 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.635 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4