Integrated task- Altruism
The lecture completely refutes the passage. it is said in the lecture that, the perceived acts of altruism are nothing more than sneaky methods of gaining advantage for one's self. Contrary to the belief in the passage that sentinels risk their lives for the cause of the whole group, the professor says that the meerkat sentinels are in fact less prone to outside threats. The alarm sentinels give off causes to group to move rashly which draws the predators attention towards them, thus drawing away the attention from the sentinels.
The lecture refutes the fact that these meerkats are altruistic in the sense that they gain nothing in exchange of their services. In fact, researches have shown that they have a full stomach as they perform this “altruistic” duty and have a better chance of escaping from danger because they witness it first Proffer also offers a different underlying motivation that causes people to believe that acts such as donating an organ or sharing food with someone in need are altruistic. She says that people gain appreciation as a result of such acts, which may be deemed by some much more important than materialistic gains.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...lecture completely refutes the passage. it is said in the lecture that, the percei...
^^
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in the lecture that, the perceived acts of altruism are nothing more than sneaky...
^^^^
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...sneaky methods of gaining advantage for ones self. Contrary to the belief in the pas...
^^^^
Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'grouping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: grouping
...ts. The alarm sentinels give off causes to group to move rashly which draws the predator...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 453, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'predators'' or 'predator's'?
Suggestion: predators'; predator's
...to group to move rashly which draws the predators attention towards them, thus drawing aw...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, thus, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 978.0 1373.03311258 71% => OK
No of words: 195.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01538461538 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70512698991 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630769230769 0.540411800872 117% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 419.366225166 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.0149647423 49.2860985944 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.714285714 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.09492273731 49% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0215346463962 0.272083759551 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0116010378678 0.0996497079465 12% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284166232627 0.0662205650399 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.01816142199 0.162205337803 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01816142199 0.0443174109184 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 63.6247240618 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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