Integrated TOEFL Writing
In the lecture, the author makes several points about the upsurge of the manufacturing plants. He argues that iron and steel, sailing ships and the need for weapons were the main reasons for the rise of the factories. However, the reading contends that steam engines, railroad and steamships as well as the exponential growth of property rights accounted for the upturn of the factories.
The first point that the lecturer uses to challenge the reading is the significance of iron and steel in the expansion of the factories. According to him, for steam engines needed to be constructed from iron and steel, these metals were integral components for the steam engines and the construction of train and ships, which were important in building the factories. Furthermore, to furnish another convincing evidence for his claim, the lecturer opined that factories were built near the resources of iron and steel. This differs from the reading in that the reading states that steam engines played a crucial part in the upsurge of the factory, as these machines provide its user with sufficient power to accomplish the work of many people, but demanded to be placed in protective buildings to maximize its productivity. According to the reading, this directly led to the rise of the factories.
Another point that the lecturer uses to refute the reading is that railroads were not invented until 1840 and only became prevalent at the end of the 19th century. He claims that the indisputable truth that factories had come into existence decades prior to railroads strengthen his claim that railroads did not contribute greatly to the rise of the factory. Moreover, he propounds that sailing ships were widely used until the beginning of the 20th century, so steamships could not have had an important role in the rise of the factory. The reading, on the other hand, cites the fact that railroads and steamships help complete the procedure of manufacturing and distributing goods across the globe, as railroads provided transports for delivering raw materials, and steamships helped allocating the goods worldwide. According to the reading, this acted as an impetus for the rise of the factory.
As a final point, to confront the reading’s argument, the teacher asserts that the initial aim of factories was to manufacture weapons. He points out that in Russia or England, manufacturing plants were centralized to producing weapons, adn had specific standards for the products they made. To counter the assertion, the reading declares that on account of the increase in property rights, the erstwhile farmers no longer had land to cultivate, and they had to work as cheap workers in the factories as a last resort. This upsurge in the amount of low-cost labor stimulated the exponential growth of manufacturing plants.
To put it briefly, the ideas made in the lecture run against the reading, Iron and steel, sailing ships and the need for weapons demonstrate that doubts have arisen over the viability of views indicated in the reading material.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 787, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to allocate' or 'allocate'.
Suggestion: to allocate; allocate
...ng raw materials, and steamships helped allocating the goods worldwide. According to the r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, as to, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 30.3222958057 228% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2569.0 1373.03311258 187% => OK
No of words: 498.0 270.72406181 184% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15863453815 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.04702891845 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7763235496 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 145.348785872 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473895582329 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 419.366225166 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 2.5761589404 349% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8452024552 49.2860985944 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.722222222 110.228320801 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0107950108476 0.272083759551 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0029403031539 0.0996497079465 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0121231804749 0.0662205650399 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00504814964573 0.162205337803 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0100962992915 0.0443174109184 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.3589403974 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 63.6247240618 193% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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