integrated writing TPO-45
The reading discusses a fascinating topic pertaining to the skeptical evidence related to the bee's fossils which have been found in Arizona and provides several reasons of support. However, the professor in the lecture believes that these reasons which have been mentioned in the reading are not convience and opposes each of the author's reasons.
First of all, the author of the reading uggests that no fossil of bees have been found around 200 million years ago and just remains fossils are realted to the 100 million years ago. In contrast, the professor explains that it is true we do not have the fossils of 200 million years ago, but the reason is that the resins which produced by tree and preserved the bee during that time was very rare, so, the fossils of that time could not be remains. Hence, the lack of fossils of 200 million years ago not mean that the bees were not exist that time.
Furthermore, the author of the reading says that there were not any flowers at 200 million years ago which are the main food source of the bees, but the professor explains that the bees were exist before flowers and the early bees utillized from another type of plants for feeding during that time.
Finally, the author of the reading says that the structure of the nest chambers of bees in Arizona lack of some details such as caps in compaire to the modern bee. In the lecture the professor explans that the chemical analysis of the chamber such as water proof substance demonstrated and confirmed that these are similar to the chambers which have been made by modern bees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 535, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...ars ago not mean that the bees were not exist that time. Furthermore, the author o...
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Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...e professor explains that the bees were exist before flowers and the early bees utill...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...hemical analysis of the chamber such as water proof substance demonstrated and confirmed th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, so, in contrast, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68100358423 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20494497691 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462365591398 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 393.3 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 21.2450331126 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.3586700928 49.2860985944 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.25 110.228320801 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.875 21.698381199 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06452816374 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0723500621289 0.272083759551 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362778026429 0.0996497079465 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0217735457418 0.0662205650399 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0473752729674 0.162205337803 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222435035 0.0443174109184 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.3589403974 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 53.8541721854 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.498013245 149% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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