Integrated writting- Altruism
The text belives that the individuals involved in altuistic acts gains no benefit and they act selfless. BUt the lecturer is not convinced with the fact based on the detailed recent studies done on Meercat behaviour. She is of the opinion due to couple of reasons explained here.
First of all, lecturer concluded on the basis of closed study on Meercat that sentinel is the one who got importance and eat first, before guarding.In contrast text states that sentinel goes without food and guards others and that is contradicted by lecturer.
Another, opinion given by the lecturer is sentinel is the first who sense the danger, is the first to run after alarm and running alone to burrow is easy as compared to running in crowd.So,again disagrees on the view of text about senitels selfless behaviour that running alone post more danger.
Altogether, the lecturer also puts the point on Human's higest altuirstic behaviour.An extreme altuistic behaviour by human is giving kidney to relative or a stranger. But the person gets appreciation from the society and also feels the sense of self worth that is very valuable to some people.
SO, the lecturer's view is logic and sound that individuals performing altuistic acts also gain some or the other benefit on other hand.
- Travelling to your own country or tavelling to foreign country which benefits more 76
- Integrated writting Altruism 3
- Now more than ever people are aware of the importance of good health Unfortunately many have poor lifestyle habits that are difficult to break It is crucial for people to adopt better physical and dietary routines if they expect to improve their health Wh 66
- Altuism is the type of behaviour in which an animal sacrifises its own interest for that of another animal or group of animal 3
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adult prefer to live with their families for a longer time Which of these situation do you think is better Use specific reason and examples to support youe opinion 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...portance and eat first, before guarding.In contrast text states that sentinel goes...
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Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...tance and eat first, before guarding.In contrast text states that sentinel goes without ...
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Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...burrow is easy as compared to running in crowd.So,again disagrees on the view of ...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...s easy as compared to running in crowd.So,again disagrees on the view of text abo...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , again
...easy as compared to running in crowd.So,again disagrees on the view of text about sen...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: An
...t on Humans higest altuirstic behaviour.An extreme altuistic behaviour by human is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1061.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 213.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98122065728 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62823593854 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582159624413 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 419.366225166 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.1663779558 49.2860985944 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.625 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 21.698381199 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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