It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.
Each occupation has its own contributions to the development of society. There are works which serve human’s spirit, while others improve human quality of life. Artists and scientist can be named as two different representatives for the types of work. Personal speaking, I think both of them are vital parts and have equal roles in society for three below reasons: while artists serve human’s spiritual life, scientists serve human’s physical one, and we all need both to fulfill and balanced living.
First of all, artists take care human’s feeling or spirit. Talking about artists, we think about who create beauty: fantastic poems, pictures, songs, performances... Artists use their unlimited imaginations and their incredible passion create pastiches which arouse all human’s sense from visual, hearing to feeling. They message us via every works they made which can touch our hearts and even can strongly influence in our motions. For example, there was an unlucky girl had a tragic accident when she was 4. The accident left her paralyzed from waist down. Her future seemed to be suddenly closed in front of her innocent eyes; she had to depend on a wheelchair for the rest of her life. But, everything changes when her parents took her out for a ballet performance. The white-dressed dancers with graceful movements had inspired her to practice, practice and practice to dance someday. Clearly, the art has great impact in human’s feeling: make us cry, make us laugh, flood in sympathy, then right after that can fly over the moon. In that way, artists have an amazing power to control our feelings, our motions, so that they are important and have huge contributions to our society.
Secondly, scientists also have indispensable role because they benefit human’s desire to understand themselves and their surroundings. For example, humans always want to know how to prolong their living time for ever, or they always have unanswered question like: what exactly where and when human comes from, and is it real about having the life exists in other planets. Scientists are who work tirelessly, even devote their lives in laboratories to answer the unexplained things. They study about lots of fields from mathematics, physics, chemistry, biology, geography, to astronomy… Then they supply us with knowledge and solutions to improve the life better. For instance, the world records many dramatic diseases. Thank for effort of scientists, we have vaccines, or best medicines to save the patients and protect others’ health. Recently, computer scientists also achieve breakthrough in industrial robotics which can assist human in daily activities, working environments, and the emergences such as find the victims in natural disasters. Furthermore, with the development of nanotechnology, microscopic robots can swim through bodily fluids to deliver drugs, check up on arteries, repair damage cells and generally keeping people healthy. After all, it can’t be denied scientists’ great contribution for society’s well-being.
Last but not least, human need both artists and science for balanced life. As I have mentioned, if the artists take care of human’s motions, the scientists find solutions to make our life better. Why both of them are important? Let’s begin with the structure of human’s brain. In generally, we all have two cerebral hemispheres: the left hemisphere is associated with logical thinking, analysis, accuracy while the right one, on the other hand, focus on aesthetics, feeling and creativity. No one totally the left brain person or the right brain person. In natural way, human always have need in both logical analysis and creativity. A computer scientist who often work more than 12 hours per day with algorithms and numbers; it doesn’t mean he is a bored person or an unromantic man. In contrast, he is not only a scientist, but also a guitarist or an amazing artist in cooking. In my opinion, feeling is like our knowledge; they need to be refreshed regularly. That’s why both the artists and the scientists are equally important to people.
In conclusion, because each of us has our own point of view, and each occupations has its own contribution to our society, all comparisons about some particular jobs are unfair. But, with me, artists and scientists both have huge contributions to make the world a better place.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
.... Talking about artists, we think about who create beauty: fantastic poems, picture...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'after all', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'in general', 'such as', 'talking about', 'first of all', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246543778802 0.261695866417 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.126728110599 0.158904122519 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0864055299539 0.0723426182421 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0380184331797 0.0435111971325 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0633640552995 0.0277247811725 229% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0990783410138 0.128828473217 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0172811059908 0.0370669169778 47% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.96550406047 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0253456221198 0.0208969081088 121% => OK
Particles: 0.00230414746544 0.00154638098197 149% => OK
Determiners: 0.0691244239631 0.128158765124 54% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00806451612903 0.0158828679856 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0172811059908 0.0114777025283 151% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4443.0 1645.83664459 270% => OK
No of words: 702.0 271.125827815 259% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.32905982906 6.08160592843 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.14735685561 4.04852973271 127% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.371794871795 0.374372842146 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.309116809117 0.287516216867 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.223646723647 0.187439937562 119% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.162393162393 0.113142543107 144% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96550406047 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 372.0 145.348785872 256% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529914529915 0.539623497131 98% => OK
Word variations: 70.8664128034 53.8517498576 132% => OK
How many sentences: 36.0 13.0529801325 276% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 19.5 21.7502111507 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9749690586 49.3711431718 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.416666667 132.220823453 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 21.7502111507 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.638888888889 0.878197800319 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 50.4116809117 50.5018328374 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.59090909091 1.90840788429 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337740018788 0.549887131256 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.075365295972 0.142949733639 53% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0607261900022 0.0787303798458 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.384636346025 0.631733273073 61% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130660863614 0.139662658121 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106606058561 0.266732575781 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737454700136 0.103435571967 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.354545565941 0.414875509568 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0794075841502 0.0530846634433 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245599962343 0.40443939384 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198264664132 0.0528353158467 38% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 4.33554083885 530% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.26048565121 141% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 3.49668874172 200% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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