Both the writer and the lecturer declares about Marko Polo’s controversial trip to china.While the writer clarifies Polo has never been to china since there’s no proper record about it and arab,persian merchants and his trip might be fabricated by them, the lecturer encounters it by bringing up statements saying Polo, in reality, has been to China and gives reasons.
First and foremost the writer mentions Polo was an advisor to Kubilai Khan and took an essential position in Chinese politics.The main ground why it’s highly imprecise is there is no documented proof that demonstrated his presence in china.To be more accurate, Chinese history contains all the noteworthy and important occurrences and it somehow doesn’t include any record about the claim.However,the lecturer fails to agree by making evidence-based point that Italian diplomat also visited China 100 years after Polo’s travel and even though,it was, in fact, worthy of note event in chinese history there was no report about it’s existence.
Secondly the writer clarifies that tea was highly consumed by the chinese to get pleasure and was, indeed, important figure in China.Despite the fact that tea was popular and relevant in Chinese culture,Polo has never brought up tea in his journals.The lecturer, yet, refutes it by illustrating that tea was eminent in china till the invasion of mongols and did lost its relevancy after that.THe reason behind it is mongols were nomadic,namely,did not cultivate but farm and did not drink tea instead they consumed wine made with milk.
Finally,the writer claims Polo recounted about chinese architecture but never illustrated The Great Wall,though, it was considered noteworthy and important defensive construction to avert the raiders, the mongols.If he has actually been to china he would never neglect to narrate about the Great Wall in his articles.Conversely, the lecturer opposes by coming up with declarations that The Great Wall was destroyed during the mongol invasions and Polo’s travel coincides to be at the same period of time with it.The building ,in fact, did not exist at his time.The construction was rebuilt after dethroning of mongols,which occurred 600 years after Polo’s trip to china.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 30.3222958057 185% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1373.03311258 140% => OK
No of words: 351.0 270.72406181 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46723646724 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12975638629 2.5805825403 121% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54415954416 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 419.366225166 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 87.0 21.2450331126 410% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.728000066 49.2860985944 245% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 479.75 110.228320801 435% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 87.75 21.698381199 404% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.5 7.06452816374 347% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 4.19205298013 525% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126738805612 0.272083759551 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931420165984 0.0996497079465 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424938392351 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931420165984 0.162205337803 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424938392351 0.0443174109184 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 48.2 13.3589403974 361% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -25.29 53.8541721854 -47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 5.55761589404 286% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.4 11.0289183223 348% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.63 12.2367328918 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.41 8.42419426049 147% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 63.6247240618 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.7273730684 266% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 36.8 10.498013245 351% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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