TOEFL TPO 13 - Integrated Writing Task

The author of the reading states that selling fossils to private collectors is an unfortunate development for both science and the general public and give three arguments. The lecturer holds the opposite idea with the reading.

The reading states that the public will not have a chance to see fossils because new private collectors will not permit them to visit so; it may cause a decline in public interest in fossils. The lecturer, on the other hand, points out that the public will not be deprived of seeing fossils because many schools or other foundations can buy many fossils and make them available to people by exhibiting them.

The passage also claims that scientist will likely lose access to many important fossils since they cannot compete with collectors who can spend millions on fossils. The lecturer finds this argument unrealistic and posits it by explaining that scientists are people who discover and examine fossils first. So, they already have an access to many important fossils.

Last, according to the article, collectors do not care about details on fossils and destroy many valuable scientific pieces of evidence. The speaker, on the contrary, believes that there are not enough operations run by many schools or universities to discover fossils and most operations are being run by private collectors so; it would be better for us to have at least more fossils rather than being not able to uncover them.

Votes
Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...te development for both science and the general public and give three arguments. The lecturer ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the opposite idea with the reading. The reading states that the public will not...
^^^
Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... decline in public interest in fossils. The lecturer, on the other hand, points out...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ilable to people by exhibiting them. The passage also claims that scientist will...
^^^
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tors who can spend millions on fossils. The lecturer finds this argument unrealisti...
^^^
Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ne fossils first. So, they already have an access to many important fossils. Last, acc...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, at least, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1206.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 237.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08860759494 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51476085293 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548523206751 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8455085294 49.2860985944 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.5121214259 0.272083759551 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206293718465 0.0996497079465 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911030200984 0.0662205650399 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303640210179 0.162205337803 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372808014947 0.0443174109184 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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