TPO-08 - Integrated Writing Task
Toward the end of his life, the Chevalier de Seingalt (1725-1798) wrote a Chevalier memoir recounting his life and adventures. The Chevalier was a somewhat controversial figure, but since he met many famous people, including kings and writers, his memoir's has become a valuable historical source about European society in the eighteenth century. However, some critics have raised doubts about the accuracy of the memoir. They claim that the Chevalier distorted or invented many events in the the to make his life seem more exciting and glamorous than it really was.
For example, in his memoir the Chevalier claims that while living in Switzerland, he was very wealthy, and it is known that he spent a great deal of money there on parties and gambling. However, evidence has recently surfaced that the Chevalier borrowed considerable sums of money from a Swiss merchant. Critics thus argue that if the Chevalier had really been very rich, he would not have needed to borrow money.
Critics are also skeptical about the accuracy of the conversations that the Chevalier records in the memoir between himself and the famous writer Voltaire. No one doubts that the Chevalier and Voltaire met and conversed. However, critics complain that the memoir cannot possibly capture these conversations accurately, because it was written many years after the conversations occurred. Critics point out that it is impossible to remember exact phrases from extended the held many years earlier.
Critics have also questioned the memoir's account of the Chevalier's escape from a notorious prison in Venice, Italy. He claims to have escaped the Venetian the by using a piece of metal to make a hole in the ceiling and climbing through the roof. Critics claim that while such a daring escape makes for enjoyable reading, it is more likely that the Chevaliers jailers were bribed to free him. They point out that the Chevalier had a number of politically well-connected friends in Venice who could have offered a bribe.
The reading and the lecture are both about the memoirs of the chevalier de seingalt. Whereas the author of the reading states that his memoir is an inaccurate document, the lecturer suggests that the memoir is a reliable record. The lecturer casts doubt on the main points made in the reading by providing three arguments.
First of all, according to the reading, the chevalier claims that he was wealthy while living in Switzerland, but since the chevalier is known to have borrowed money there, he cannot have been very rich. However, the lecturer disputes this point. she suggests that the chevalier’s wealth was in the form of property that had to be sold in order to generate cash. so he wasn’t poor. Furthermore, she mentions that the chevalier just had to borrow money for a few days while he waited for his property to be sold. Secondly, the reading states that the conversations recorded in the memoir may not be very accurate. these conversations occurred many years before the memoir was written, so it would have been impossible for the chevalier to remember them accurately. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. she argues that chevalier often recorded conversations in his journals each night after the conversations took place. The chevalier wrote down everything he could remember from them. In addition, she points out that there were witnesses confirming that the chevalier regularly consulted these notes when writing his memoir years later.
Finally, the reading claims that the chevalier's depiction of his own escape from a famous prison in Venice cannot possibly be honest since the chevalier could have asked politically well-connected friends to offer his jailers a bribe to free him. On the other hand, the lecture believes that other prisoners who had even more powerful political connections were never able to bribe their way to freedom, so the chevalier probably couldn't either. Moreover, she points out that prison records indicate that soon after the chevalier's escape, the ceiling of his room in the prison had to be repaired
In conclusion, although the reading and the lecture are both about the memoirs of the chevalier de seingalt, the two/three main points made in the reading are effectively challenged by the lecturer.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... First of all, according to the reading, the chevalier claims that he was wealthy...
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Line 5, column 249, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...ever, the lecturer disputes this point. she suggests that the chevalier's weal...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...d to be sold in order to generate cash. so he wasn't poor. Furthermore, she m...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...in the memoir may not be very accurate. these conversations occurred many years befor...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...ss, the lecturer refutes this argument. she argues that chevalier often recorded co...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'chevaliers'' or 'chevalier's'?
Suggestion: chevaliers'; chevalier's
... Finally, the reading claims that the chevaliers depiction of his own escape from a famo...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...y to freedom, so the chevalier probably couldnt either. Moreover, she points out that p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1373.03311258 140% => OK
No of words: 371.0 270.72406181 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19676549865 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75637540344 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504043126685 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.0411226488 49.2860985944 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.411764706 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2941176471 7.06452816374 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493230679327 0.272083759551 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161437047521 0.0996497079465 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10133360184 0.0662205650399 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268667893987 0.162205337803 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127360007698 0.0443174109184 287% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.