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Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Regarding the effect of technology upon young people. personally, i disagree with point that technology has made children less creative.I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in the following essay.
First, technology provides new devices like computers, phones which together with the internet make a wonderfull small world of fascinating amount of information, these educational informations are easily accessible, so by saving efforts needed in searching they spend more effort in creativity. my personal experience is a compelling example of this, when iwas at school i used to use computer for every subject i took and these informations help me to be more counsious about things i studied and easily provides me a various way to built my own base about subject and so i became more creative in my pattern of study.
Secondly, it gives a huge system of interactive videos,pictures,and samples of things that is hard to find in the real word, so child wont be frustrated or confused about things he curuous about, moreover he may uses them for generating his own ideas,thoughts that may at the end makes him more creative and selfesteamd. For instant , when i was 10 years old i used to watch videos about how things made naturally or by manufactory this gave me skills to fix any proplem happened in house like malfunctioning televsion or phone.
In conclusion, i am of the openion that technology helps children to become more creative, this is because it gives a wonderful system of informations and a big big base of helpfull videos.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 261.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05363984674 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05469439682 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.1344086022 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.942528633 48.9658058833 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 188.428571429 100.406767564 188% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2857142857 20.6045352989 181% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0824874883351 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391824332174 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381875640439 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0540940214434 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03089463395 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 11.7677419355 178% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.0537634409 167% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.247311828 205% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.