The reading passage and the lecture are both about humankind’s influence on the birds’ population. The author of the snippet claims that the population of birds is significantly depleting due to the growth of the humankind. On the other hand, the lecturer considers that the statements made in the reading passage are controvertial, and she reinforces her opinion by providng several examples.
First of all, there is identified in the reading fragment that increasing human’s population is leading to the decreasing the area of forests and grasslends, and due to that the bird’s population is depleting. However, the speaker argues that, because the growing infrostructure of the cities provides better and larger habitant for other types of birds, such as pidgions. Consecuently, due to that some species are depleting, but others are inflating , and predators who are feeding by this birds are inflating too.
The subsequent lecturer argument is raleted to the statement made in the excerpt, that usage of ofchemical pesticides eventually can also kill birds. The lecturer disputes this by claiming that nowadays scientists invent more and more novel types of pesticides which are harmless for different species exept insects. And she also states that, invention of pest-resistant crops can deminish pesticides usage in the future. Thus, this problem of negative influence of chemicals on birds will be completely solved.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... are depleting, but others are inflating , and predators who are feeding by this b...
^^
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ting , and predators who are feeding by this birds are inflating too. The subsequ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, thus, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1228.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 222.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53153153153 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08152351386 2.5805825403 119% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572072072072 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6061470248 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.8 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25512450031 0.272083759551 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954916167458 0.0996497079465 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493802629531 0.0662205650399 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158247944261 0.162205337803 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462706080053 0.0443174109184 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.2367328918 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.42419426049 119% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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