TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task
In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for birds, these trends are likely to continue, with the result that the number of birds in the United States will necessarily decline.
First, as human populations and settlements continue to expand, birds' natural habitats will continue to disappear. Forests, wetlands, and grasslands will give way to ever more homes, malls, and offices. As the traditional areas suitable for birds keep decreasing, so will the size of the bird populations that depend on those vanishing habitats.
Second, agricultural activities must increase to keep pace with the growing human population. The growth of agriculture will also result in the further destruction of bird habitats as more and more wilderness areas are converted to agricultural use. As a result, bird populations in rural areas will continue to decline.
Third, as human settlements expand and agriculture increases, the use ofchemical pesticides will also increase. Pesticides are poisons designed to kill agricultural and home garden pests, such as insects, but inevitably, pesticides get into the water and into the food chain for birds where they can harm birds. Birds that eat the poisoned insects or drink contaminated water can die as a result, and even if pesticides do not kill birds outright, they can prevent them from reproducing successfully. So pesticides have significantly contributed to declines in bird population, and because there will continue to be a need to control agricultural pests in the future, this decline will continue.
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss negative advantage of over population in agriculture and lands, missing lots of birds habitat and decline the mumber of bird spiciese. In the reading passage, author metions that natrul habitat of birds are disapeared becouse of the tree main reasons; howeve, in the listening part, the lecturer challenges what the author states and refutes the reasons.
To begin with, as mentioned in the article, the author sets forth that human populations are expanded and it is caused varius tips of bird lose their habitate and birds decreases in the size of the population; nevertheless, the professor rebutes the reasons asserting that with urbon developments many speasiece have more foods and actually they have larger habitate now. it would be more prey for some birds such as crowds and pingy. Therefor, some population increase and some population decline.
Secondly, the author points out that with accelerating in the way of agriculture and more attempting to privide foods for residents, more wildness arias have destroyed. nevertheless, the proffosor flatly cantradicts the reasons and contends that there is less and less land nowadays for agreculture. it means that farmers utlelize less land and aposse from that thet introduce new crops as a result of this practice there is no need to destroy land.
Fainally, the author claims that pestcides has poisend foods and water, ruiend viriety of species of birds. In contrast, the professor is of the opinion that givernmens are awarre of the demerits of the pests. Inorder to tacke to the issue, firstly, scientists discoverd new pesticides that has less disadvantages and secindly, now they grow crops that are unattracive to pasts and resistant crops infront of the pasts do not birds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...actually they have larger habitate now. it would be more prey for some birds such ...
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Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nevertheless
...ts, more wildness arias have destroyed. nevertheless, the proffosor flatly cantradicts the r...
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Line 5, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...and less land nowadays for agreculture. it means that farmers utlelize less land a...
^^
Line 7, column 296, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun disadvantages is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...tists discoverd new pesticides that has less disadvantages and secindly, now they gr...
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Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'bird'?
Suggestion: bird
...stant crops infront of the pasts do not birds.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 289.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2214532872 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68704671794 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56401384083 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.6074064319 49.2860985944 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.181818182 110.228320801 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2727272727 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4545454545 7.06452816374 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28076737755 0.272083759551 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900451421748 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666173108113 0.0662205650399 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14375062937 0.162205337803 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672807863327 0.0443174109184 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.3589403974 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.42419426049 117% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 63.6247240618 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.