The reading passage and the lecture both discuss the three possible claims of Robert E.Peary, who argues that he reached the North Pole. The author avers that these arguments are strong enough to support his claim. The Professor points out that there is no solid evidence and no one is convincing.
First claim, the article mentions the committee, who conducted the investigatiion concluded that Peary indeed reached the Pole. The speaker casts doubt in this by explaining that it is right but not objected because Peary's friend directed the committee and this investigation was done only within two days, so it is not trustworthy and bias.
The second claim, the reading passage states that recent expedition made by Avery has proven his claim. The professor disagrees with that by saying that Avery carries less weight than the actual one and within two different weather conditions , so it is immpossible to provide evidence.
The third claim, the reading material claims the photographs and their shadow give us a picture of the situation of the North Pole that is perfect the actual position. The professor argues that by telling that the technique used to analyze the shadow is primitive and not precise. Besides, the photographs are blurry and fuzzy because of it were taken a 100 years ago
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Essay evaluation report
First claim, the article mentions the committee,
First, the article mentions the committee,
so it is not trustworthy and bias.
so it is not trustworthy and biased. // bias is a noun.
Definitions of bias
noun
prejudice in favor of or against one thing, person, or group compared with another, usually in a way considered to be unfair.
there was evidence of bias against foreign applicants
in some sports, such as lawn bowling, the irregular shape given to a ball.
This model bowl has the Traditional bias which has stood the test of time wherever Lawn Bowls is played.
verb
cause to feel or show inclination or prejudice for or against someone or something.
readers said the paper was biased toward the conservatives
The second claim, the reading passage states that recent expedition made by Avery has proven his claim
Second , the reading passage states that the recent expedition made by Avery has proven his claim
that is perfect the actual position.
that is perfect at the actual position.
The professor argues that by telling that ...
The professor argues that ... //'by telling that' is repetitive
because of it were taken a 100 years ago
because it were taken a 100 years ago
Sentence: First claim, the article mentions the committee, who conducted the investigatiion concluded that Peary indeed reached the Pole.
Error: investigatiion Suggestion: investigation
Sentence: The professor disagrees with that by saying that Avery carries less weight than the actual one and within two different weather conditions , so it is immpossible to provide evidence.
Error: immpossible Suggestion: impossible
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
2. No. of Words: 217 250 //more content wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 10 12
No. of Words: 217 250
No. of Characters: 1061 1200
No. of Different Words: 125 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.838 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.889 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.481 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.363 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.046 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Peary
...s the three possible claims of Robert E.Peary, who argues that he reached the North P...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng passage states that recent expedition made by Avery has proven his claim. The ...
^^
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...on made by Avery has proven his claim. The professor disagrees with that by saying...
^^^
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... within two different weather conditions , so it is immpossible to provide evidenc...
^^
Line 4, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... is immpossible to provide evidence. The third claim, the reading material claim...
^^^
Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le that is perfect the actual position. The professor argues that by telling that t...
^^^
Line 4, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es, the photographs are blurry and fuzzy because of it were taken a 100 years ago...
^^
Line 4, column 370, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...because of it were taken a 100 years ago
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, second, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 30.3222958057 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1086.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 216.0 270.72406181 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02777777778 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52979862366 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592592592593 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 419.366225166 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5340096936 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.6 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 7.06452816374 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338477944005 0.272083759551 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11618525241 0.0996497079465 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868296548757 0.0662205650399 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180870338893 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058651941648 0.0443174109184 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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