TPO 29
In this set of material, the author and the lecture disagree on the merit of whether the Edmontosaurus dinosaurs; which have Elephant- size fossils, migrated from the harsh north weather of Alaska 's North Slope, the area of humungous snow in the arctic climate. The reading passage supports a theory of migration and states three postulated reasons. He believes that the feeding habits of than animal which was herbivores, the unearthed skeletons from the same site of that dinosaur were many mimic herds new animals, and the physical and the speed capacity of migration for long distance. In contrary, the professor in the lecture challenges the passage. He presents three counterclaims in the lecture proving that all the reading hypothesis are skeptical. Following is a brief interpretation of this perspective.
Frist of all, the reading passage claims that the Endomontosaur's plant diet helped than dinosaur to migrate in the harsh weather searching for a place warmer and rich with plants. However, the listening passage refutes this idea of the reading; he believes that the climate back time was not cold. In fact, it was warmer; the sunshine was 24 hours daily, and richer with plant food which supported that dinosaur to settle and never migrated.
Secondly, the reading passage asserts that the fossilized skeleton unearthed of that dinosaur was similar to many herds mammals in our recent life which encourage the possibility of migration. Nevertheless, the lecturer opposes the passage in this point of view, too. He thinks that living in a herd does not necessary that animal should migrate. In actuality, there are several mammals in our recent life which live in a herd but not migrated. He gives an example of species of Elk in the USA which are plant eater; they prefer living in a pack to give them more protection and support and not to migrate.
Last but not the least, the writer in the essay argues that the substantial body of that Elephant size dinosaur made it capable of moving long distances. He claims that the endomosaurs were able to migrate in a good and fast pace about 1,600 kilometers in an average of 5 km/hr towards the south and warmer environment. Whereas, the professor in the lecture casts on doubt with this argument. He questioned the capability of the youngest or juveniles endomosaurs dinosaurs; they did not have the same speed or the capacity of their adult herds to migrate that long distance with this speed. Furthermore, the mature once of that dinosaur did not move or change their place leaving their youngs behinds. Therefore, it was impossible to predict the migration theory a convincing theory.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 442 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes. The introduction is wordy. At least this can be removed:
He believes that the feeding habits of than animal which was herbivores, the unearthed skeletons from the same site of that dinosaur were many mimic herds new animals, and the physical and the speed capacity of migration for long distance.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 12
No. of Words: 442 250
No. of Characters: 2163 1200
No. of Different Words: 213 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.207 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.298 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the Edmontosaurus dinosaurs; which have Elephant- size fossils, migrated from th...
^^
Line 4, column 320, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...wards the south and warmer environment. Whereas, the professor in the lecture casts on ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 22.412803532 174% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 30.3222958057 191% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 1373.03311258 161% => OK
No of words: 442.0 270.72406181 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00452488688 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.04702891845 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67295987282 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 145.348785872 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 419.366225166 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5384275498 49.2860985944 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.6 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 7.06452816374 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290262095587 0.272083759551 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772449845414 0.0996497079465 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559646100606 0.0662205650399 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171113493151 0.162205337803 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464473777175 0.0443174109184 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 63.6247240618 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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