TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive,

In the lecture, the professor discusses why the hypothesis in the passage that edmontosours migrated south to avoid wintertime is not reasonable.

To begin with, the passage claims that edmontosours lived too north to have sufficient plants for food, so they must migrate. However, the speaker refutes this by saying that in North Slope it was warmer in edmontosour's time and had sunshine 24 hours a day in the summer. So the plants were abundant and dead plants were sufficient winter.

Secondly, whilst the passage states that edmontosours migrated because they lived in herds, the lecturer points out that many animals living in herd actually do not migrate, but they get protection by doing so. Thus, it is not convincing that living in herds indicates edmontosours migrated.

Last, the professor argues that young edmontosaurs was incapable of running as fast as adults and can not be abandoned in winters, so they must be accompanied by adults, which means that edmontosaur population is unlikely to migrate.This is a response to the assertion made in the reading passage that edmontosaurs could migrate simply because the adults can move really fast.

In conclusion, based on the reasons and analysis given by the speaker above, the lack of food in the north, living in herds and the wonderful locomotive power of adults can not be the evidence of the migration of edmontosours.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...osaur population is unlikely to migrate.This is a response to the assertion made in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, really, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1170.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 228.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13157894737 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83705149549 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565789473684 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.9593325062 49.2860985944 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.25 110.228320801 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251080043375 0.272083759551 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101512909145 0.0996497079465 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301879063911 0.0662205650399 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125369875749 0.162205337803 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302019955431 0.0443174109184 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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