TPO 30 Burning mirror
In the lecture, the professor asserts that the claims made in the reading about the burning mirror being impractical and ineffective weapons are unconvincing. This casts doubt on the reading which states, however, there are several reasons to suspect that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks of Syracuse never really built such a device.
First and foremost, the speaker posits that Greeks did not need a large single sheet of copper to form a big burning mirror. In fact, the experiment has shown that single flat pieces of polished copper can form a parabolic shape. Furthermore, because mathematicians knew the properties of parabola, they could direct the assembly to construct a parabolic figure. This contradicts the text, which proclaims the technology for manufacturing a large sheet of copper with such specifications did not exist in the ancient world.
Moreover, the lecturer argues that the burning mirror would not have taken as long as 10 minutes to start a ship’ fire . Actually, these ships were not made entirely of wood but also from other materials called pitches that could work quickly enough to put on the fire. For example, Romanians used these sticky substances to seal pieces of wood together and make them waterproof. Therefore, they could have needed a few seconds to set the ship into fire even if the ship was moving. This opposes the reading, which declares that it is unlikely that Roman ships stayed perfectly still for that much time, for this reason, weapons would have been very impractical and ineffective.
Finally, the professor explains that despite they had the flaming arrows, Greeks had to build a burning mirror as a device to defeat themselves. In fact, because the Romanian' soldiers were familiar with arrows, they would have been watching for them and taking caution. For example, they could see just the mirror with no burning rise in the mirror then all a sudden, surprisingly magical fire occurs in a ship. Consequently, this tool has been more surprising and effective that flaming arrows.
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... did not exist in the ancient world. Moreover, the lecturer argues that the b...
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...long as 10 minutes to start a ship’ fire . Actually, these ships were not made ent...
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...en very impractical and ineffective. Finally, the professor explains that des...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1373.03311258 127% => OK
No of words: 343.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06997084548 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58966926427 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556851311953 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2586766967 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.933333333 110.228320801 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50002939805 0.272083759551 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150900057614 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904713610497 0.0662205650399 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277255203007 0.162205337803 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604423186187 0.0443174109184 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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