TPO 30 Integrated Writing
A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a “burning mirror”: a polished copper surface curved to focus the Sun’s rays onto Roman ships, causing them to catch fire. However, we have several reasons to suspect that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks of Syracuse never really built such a device.
<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> Both the passage and the lecture are talking about possibility of using burning mirror by Greeks. The passage trying to decline this assume by bringing some evidence about this. The lecturer want to convince audience to believe burning mirror was true, although it is unbelievable.
Firstly, passage says there were not enough technology to produce this huge mirror, however, professor explained technology were not that much progressed to make that device, though, they could assemble this mirror by gathering mirrors little by little.
Secondly, passage deny that the ship would not got fire in some a few second with movement, nevertheless, lecturer claims they did not make their ships only with wood material, they also used some material guarantee waterproofing that name is pick and burn so fast in the sun rays so it was possible to burnt the ships with concentrate rays into this part of the ships.
Finally, article makes this question that why should Greeks used this method, though, they could use flaming arrows. Professor answered this question in this way. However, they could use their older method, they used burning mirrors to attack unconsciously and surprised their enemies.</span>
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n style='font-size: 19.36px;'> Both the passage and the lecture are tal...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as true, although it is unbelievable. Firstly, passage says there were not eno...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y gathering mirrors little by little. Secondly, passage deny that the ship wou...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...y, passage deny that the ship would not got fire in some a few second with movement...
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Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun second seems to be countable; consider using: 'few seconds'.
Suggestion: few seconds
...t the ship would not got fire in some a few second with movement, nevertheless, lecturer c...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate rays into this part of the ships. Finally, article makes this question tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1061.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 195.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44102564103 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89997166097 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.540411800872 114% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 419.366225166 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 98.9052576964 49.2860985944 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 132.625 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.125 7.06452816374 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21464502591 0.272083759551 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089970860585 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619330212297 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13644391144 0.162205337803 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430307041063 0.0443174109184 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.3589403974 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.2367328918 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.