TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

In this set of materials, the reading passage explores the opposition of Sinosauropteryx of being a feathered dinosaur, and the professor's lecture deals with the same topic. However, she casts doubts on these oppositions, and in the lecture, professor provides three specific points to corroborate her opinion.
First, although the reading passage suggests that the fine lines are impossible to represent functional structures of a living dinosaur since their skin may have decomposed into fibers, the professor affirms in the lecture that their skins are well-preserved instead of decomposing. This is because other skin fossils which dig out in the same sites also preserved well; therefore the lines are evidence of feathers. Clearly, the professor's affirmation refutes its counterpart in the reading.
Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that the lines are more likely to be remains of frills than feathers, the professors contends that the lines are feathers.Then she substantiates this point with the fact that frills and feathers are composed of different chemical sources and only remains of feather contain this chemical substance.
Finally the professor assets that the feather in the tail functions as courtship whereas the author of the reading claims that the feather in the tail serves no function. The professor explains that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that peacocks also have beautiful feathers in their tails for display function.
In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses of in the reading passage, and she cogently shows that the central argument in the reading is untenable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...sors lecture deals with the same topic. However she casts doubts on these opposition, a...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this opposition' or 'these oppositions'?
Suggestion: this opposition; these oppositions
...same topic. However she casts doubts on these opposition, and in the lecture, professor provides...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 430, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
... are evidence of feathers. Clearly, the professors affirmation refutes its counterpart in ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ather contain this chemical substance. Finally the professor assets that the feather i...
^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'whereas', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.29963898917 0.261695866417 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.13357400722 0.158904122519 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0505415162455 0.0723426182421 70% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0469314079422 0.0435111971325 108% => OK
Pronouns: 0.028880866426 0.0277247811725 104% => OK
Prepositions: 0.166064981949 0.128828473217 129% => OK
Participles: 0.0216606498195 0.0370669169778 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84529735386 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0108303249097 0.0208969081088 52% => OK
Particles: 0.0072202166065 0.00154638098197 467% => OK
Determiners: 0.148014440433 0.128158765124 115% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00361010830325 0.0158828679856 23% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00361010830325 0.0114777025283 31% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1644.0 1645.83664459 100% => OK
No of words: 255.0 271.125827815 94% => OK
Chars per words: 6.44705882353 6.08160592843 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.04852973271 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.427450980392 0.374372842146 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.380392156863 0.287516216867 132% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.262745098039 0.187439937562 140% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.172549019608 0.113142543107 153% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84529735386 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552941176471 0.539623497131 102% => OK
Word variations: 54.5472106437 53.8517498576 101% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0529801325 77% => OK
Sentence length: 25.5 21.7502111507 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1781455527 49.3711431718 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.4 132.220823453 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 21.7502111507 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.3 0.878197800319 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 63.5392156863 50.5018328374 126% => OK
Elegance: 2.3275862069 1.90840788429 122% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.744820746722 0.549887131256 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.158286829998 0.142949733639 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.051204142399 0.0787303798458 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.792600449628 0.631733273073 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170682129194 0.139662658121 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.415704676811 0.266732575781 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154008889737 0.103435571967 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.3880166574 0.414875509568 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.155544443001 0.0530846634433 293% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.50899217617 0.40443939384 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118947302574 0.0528353158467 225% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Not in a correct format.

The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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