Undoubtedly, it has been an important question to governments whether to spend money on upper education or children education in order to achieve development. From my estimation, although investing on university may lead to bring some advantages in a short while, spending money on children is needed to achieve consistent development. some reasons are scrutinized as follows.
Firstly, children are the basic part of pedagogic system. Spending on them is an essential work for evolving a country. Although universities are the most important part of educational system, governments should not focus on them immensely. By spending money on children, each country can establish their basin of education's structure . A glance at developed educational systems such as what is seen in Finland reveals many points in spending money on children to increase creativity and efficient of them. Therefore it seems it will be better that government spend more money for educating children than that of universities.
Admittedly, children's mind is similar to liquid which can shape immediately when placed in every mold. According to psychologists, children can be modified before 10 years old conveniently and after that this process may be come hard. Thus it will be more reasonable for government to provide some source of money and facilities to shape children's mind in profitable methods. Besides, some students in university in many countries are too old to be reformed in some aspects. Hence spending money in university should be adequate not as much as children education budget.
Finally, blossoming in a country does not occur accidently. Sociologist believe that children are the future of a country. It means that every child can be considered as a potential for government and can be a gear of evolution system in the next few years. Children can be taught different skills by government so that in the future they give back this investment to their societies. Consequently, progress in a country will depends on amount of investing on children.
In sum, due to aforementioned reasons I believe that compared to universities , spending money on children will be more beneficial. However the government should not be unaware of planning the universities budget.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 10.4613686534 201% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 30.3222958057 181% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1373.03311258 140% => OK
No of words: 358.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35474860335 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09379980319 2.5805825403 120% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522346368715 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 419.366225166 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8378806941 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2857142857 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0476190476 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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