TPO 38 Integrated writing
The professor explains arguments opposing the points stated in the reading passage about the criticizes of using Turtle Excluder Device (TED) which may help turtles not to be harmed or killed by shrimp-fishing boats.
First, the professor argues that thousands of shrimp boats are exist in United State's marines and if they only trap only one turtle each, we will see that thousands of turtles will killed. Therefore, although average rate of turtles, which get trapped in nets, seem to be very low, in fact, it could cause significant decrease in population of turtles after a while in a massive scale. Furthermore, she stated that instead of focusing on individuals benefits, we should take care more on turtles' live.
Second, the reading passage mentioned that shortening the time period which boats are permitted to keep their net beneath of the water can be consider as an alternative solution in order to protect turtles' population. On the contrary, the professor argues against this claim, and stated that it would be good in theory not in real world setting. She believes that forcing boats and fishers to limit their work time is quite impossible and government are not able to control all of the shrimp-fishing boats. As she states, checking boats to assure that whether they are equipped to TED or not is easier than setting impractical rules.
Third and last, the reading passage asserts that TEDs don't work for bigger turtles, e.g. loggerhead and leatherback turtles, and those are not able to pass the escape path that is designed based on TEDs standards. In contrast, the professor disproves the idea due to the fact that TEDs' design allow fishers to easily modify the escape passage, suggesting that TEDs are more efficient than criticizers already knew.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...gues that thousands of shrimp boats are exist in United States marines and if they on...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'kill'
Suggestion: kill
...will see that thousands of turtles will killed. Therefore, although average rate of tu...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... and government are not able to control all of the shrimp-fishing boats. As she states, ch...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 55, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., the reading passage asserts that TEDs dont work for bigger turtles, e.g. loggerhea...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
e.g., first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, while, in contrast, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 294.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04761904762 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5767051646 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585034013605 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0662580247 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.4 110.228320801 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4 21.698381199 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9 7.06452816374 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.3589403974 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 53.8541721854 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.2008830022 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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