TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The passage explains that venus is not suitable for permanent human station providing three reasons. In contrast, the lecture supports an idea of permanent station above 50 kilometres above the surface.

Firstly, the passage claims that the atmospheric pressure of venus is 90 times more than the earth's surface because of which all spacecrafts landing on its surface crash within an hour of landing. Despite the higher pressure on the surface, the lecture argues that above 50km of the surface, any station can be flown without any danger of crashing. This is because above 50km height, the atmospheric pressure of venus is somewhat like earth's surface.

Secondly, the passage lists out the gases available in the atmosphere of venus surface such as carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric acid whereas oxygen and water vapour is rarely found. Due to the absence of oxygen and water reservoir, it is way impossible to establish the permanent station. However, the lecture suggests that the required amount of oxygen and water could be produced from the compounds available in the atmosphere of venus. Thus, this could shore up the possibility of human station.

Thirdly, little sunlight on the venus surface has caused problem to create station according to the passage. In the passage, it is said that only 40% of sunlight gets into the surface, while remaining 60% of sunlight is reflected back from the surface by the dense clouds of carbon dioxide. Inspite of little sunlight, the lecture claims that considerable amount of sunlight is filtered above 50km of the surface. Even though, there is presence of clouds above 50km, sufficient sunlight would be filtered and would charge the solar power cells. Therefore, enough electricity would be produced which is applicable for the station.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly, little sunlight on the venus surface has caused problem to create station acc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, whereas, while, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20689655172 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53258432301 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510344827586 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2207254665 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.857142857 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429567117731 0.272083759551 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144975543657 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409638293605 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239324831283 0.162205337803 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619580455178 0.0443174109184 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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