TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

According to the passage, it is author conviction that some methods which are mentioned in the passage prevent birds from damage. However, the professor casts doubt on this claim and refuses all the points by providing some evidence which will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First, the reading states that one-way glass form a solid barrier for birds, therefore, the birds would not fly through the window. In the opposition, the professor implies that birds do not understand the reflection. He adds that the one-way glass is like a mirror and reflects materials like trees and sky, as a result, birds which think the reflect is a real sky or tree fly through the window, hence, it would harm them.
Second, the passage asserts that painting colorful line on window glass would solve this problem as it helps birds prevent from flying through windows by seeing that painting. Also this painting would not cause any problem for people inside the room for seeing outside. Conversely, the speaker mentions that birds would consider the opening in the painting as a hole which they can fly through it. He also explains that making the holes small enough for preventing birds from damage would make the room dark for people.
Third, the writer indicates that using magnetic field will be a solution because the birds have an ability to sense magnetic fields. On the contrast, the professor refuses this claim by declaring that birds just use this ability for long distance like their migration to other places, thus, the birds do not use it in the city for short trip.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...and sky, as a result, birds which think the reflect is a real sky or tree fly through the w...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 176, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...hrough windows by seeing that painting. Also this painting would not cause any probl...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, hence, however, second, so, therefore, third, thus, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1314.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 268.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90298507463 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28369183231 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548507462687 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7871922288 49.2860985944 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.454545455 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.469033646012 0.272083759551 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180422101224 0.0996497079465 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10199272701 0.0662205650399 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253577555016 0.162205337803 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107260448425 0.0443174109184 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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