TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The passage suggests the possible solutions to avoid birds from injuries while flying through the glass buildings. In contrast, the lecture disagrees with the solutions providing feasible reasonings against them.

Firstly, use of one-way glass instead of regular is taken as a solution in the passage where such glass is transparent from inside so that the occupants can only see through it. In the same way, birds will be able see the building avoiding flying through it. But, the lecture claims that it will not be advisable as the one-way glass reflects like mirror due to which birds will not be able to understand it. This will result them to fly right through it. So, there is high chance of such accidents.

Secondly, the use of colored designs and colored painted patterns such that only little portion on uncolored part will help emit light inside,is suggested in as the second solution in the passage. However, the lecture disagrees with it explaining those unpainted opening will be taken as holes by the birds so they will somehow try to make way out through it. Thus, the opening has to be made smaller so that birds cannot notice it which is possibly inappropriate because this will cause less light in the rooms.

Thirdly, the use of artificial magnetic field by equipping the buildings with electromagnetic signals inorder to steer birds in the direction away from the buildings, is the third solution given by the passage. Nevertheless, the lecture has an appropriate reaction against it. Since, the birds use the earth's magnetic field for long distance navigation. They don't use magnetic field to fly from one city to another city. Instead, for short distance flying, they completely depend on their eyes and brightness of light.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , is
...colored part will help emit light inside,is suggested in as the second solution in ...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ield for long distance navigation. They dont use magnetic field to fly from one city...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, while, as to, in contrast, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01712328767 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54872530038 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537671232877 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1684952664 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.506397912005 0.272083759551 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160707544173 0.0996497079465 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101707242842 0.0662205650399 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287387362353 0.162205337803 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057515058953 0.0443174109184 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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