TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

Both the passage and the professor presenting lecture discuss the probable solutions to prevent birds colliding with building's glasses, which cause millions of birds being harmed every year. The article provides three solutions, while the lecturer cast doubt all of them. The details of the contrast between the passage and the lecture is presented in the following.

First, the article states that using one-way glass could be utilized as an effective solution to prevent hurting birds. One-way glasses are transparent only in one directions and from outside, they are like solid objects. So, birds won't fly through the glasses. The lecturer refutes the effectiveness of this solution, as from outside, this glasses look like mirrors, and explains that birds cannot determine mirrors and if they see sun lights or trees in the mirror, they will fly through it.

Second, the article proposes using colorful lines, like thin stripes on glasses so that birds can distinguish the glasses than air. In contrast, lecturer claims this is a useless solution. He mentions that, by designing thin stripes on the glasses, birds still try to fly through the free space between them, and by thickening the stripes, the rooms behind the glass become dark and darker.

Finally, the article claims that equipping buildings with powerful electromagnetic devices, which create artificial magnetic held to guide birds away, could be a great way to prevent birds collide into the glasses. On the other hand, the lecturer denies this claim. He believes that, birds use their ability, which is similar to compass, only when they are on long journeys. He mentioned that, while traveling in short distances, such as flying across the cities, birds only use their eyes and sunlight to determine where to go.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one direction', 'a direction', or simply 'directions'?
Suggestion: one direction; a direction; directions
...One-way glasses are transparent only in one directions and from outside, they are like solid o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, second, so, still, while, in contrast, in short, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 289.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20415224913 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45327011575 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57785467128 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7255871835 49.2860985944 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.428571429 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.463587477088 0.272083759551 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148071672068 0.0996497079465 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987028364397 0.0662205650399 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26833521369 0.162205337803 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102700972994 0.0443174109184 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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