TPO 45_Integrated writing (bee’s fossils)
The article states that the theory of existence of Bees on Earth as early as 200 million years ago is doubtful and provides three reasons to support the idea that the fossil structure have been found in Arizona were not created by bees. However, the professor explains that the reasons are not convincing and it is possible that the fossil nest was made by bees and refutes each of the author’s reasons.
First, the reading passage states that no fossils of actual bees have ever founded that date to 200 million years ago. In contrast, the lecture refutes this point by stating that a particular type of resin is required to preserving of fossils of bees. She states that maybe bees lived 200 million years ago, but during that time there were no trees to produce appropriate resin to preserve the fossils of bees.
Second, the article claims that bees and flowering plants have a mutually dependent biological relationship, and considering that 200 million years ago is the absence of flowering plants, so bees could not exist. Conversely, the professor contends that bees could exist before flowering plants by feeding from other trees like pine. Also, she says that after the evolving of flowering plants, bees adapted to feed from them.
Finally, the reading holds the view that the fossil structure lack details to prove that it was made by bees. However, the professor casts doubt this view and contends that investigation of chemical composition fossil nest revealed that the fossil contains the same water proofing component that modern bees produce to water proof their nests.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 319, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...g component that modern bees produce to water proof their nests.
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, however, may, second, so, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 266.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0037593985 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41145121305 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507518796992 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 394.2 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.4786093311 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.1 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 21.698381199 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06452816374 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0558186838296 0.272083759551 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0262290711255 0.0996497079465 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0165921042369 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0373430939008 0.162205337803 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0053644245046 0.0443174109184 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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