The passage proposes three benefits regarding the switch from paper based to electronic medical record systems, unfortunately all of which were questioned by the lecture.
First off, the professor in the lecture does not believe that relying on electronic records is going to help save space for storage, because doctors still keep paper records as emergency back up with electronic records widely used. Meanwhile, paper records and signature are also important in potential legal disputes. Consequently, they still pay for the storage cost.
Second, that electronic medical records can reduce the chances of errors is dismissed by the professor as well, and errors generated from poor handwriting and improper transcription might still arise. In her view, doctors always take notes or write prescriptions on paper and then it is their staff that later enter the information into electronic system. As a result, inevitably, they may still find doctors’ handwriting illegible and misinterpret them.
Last, the professor argued that is still hard to take research although electronic medical records is easy to draw out information and access. Her main concern comes from the privacy law, which indicates that doctors must follow strict procedures and regulations in order to exploit patients’ data. Under the law, patients reserve the rights to block any external access to their personal medical data if they wish. Thus often the researchers are not granted the use of patients’ medical information.
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- TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews 81
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- TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 422, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...eir personal medical data if they wish. Thus often the researchers are not granted t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, still, then, thus, well, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1293.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 233.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54935622318 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86328181105 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639484978541 0.540411800872 118% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1723711611 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.545454545 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1818181818 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.512749243252 0.272083759551 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174307462816 0.0996497079465 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105399249726 0.0662205650399 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296817316484 0.162205337803 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318620883717 0.0443174109184 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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