Regarding the passage, storing medical documents of pationes electronically is more beneficial than storing them traditionally as paper-based documents. Conversely, the lecturer believes that this assert is not proven and calls it uncertain. She suggests three counter-arguments to delineate flaws of each presumption about advantages of electronic ways of storing data, which is provided by the text.
The first paragraph of the text claims that collecting data in paper-based mode is costly and need lots of spaces and also it is not easy to access them or duplicate them. In contrast, the professor admits that expenses of keeping the paper documents is not remarkable. She adds that even if doctors recruit electronic methods to store their patients data, they still need to keep that paper documents, because it is required for backup and legal affairs. This directly rejects the first theory about reducing the costs.
Moreover, the next part of the text claims that saving data in computers prevents errors which are inevitable due to illegible handwriting, or misinterpretation of tests. Again the professor denies this assumption by suggesting the fact that using electronic data storing does not necessarily prevent errors, and that is because, physicians still use paper and pens to record primitive data. Hence unreadable handwriting, or bad interpretation of data by stuff who enters data to computer is still prone to errors.
Finally the last paragraph of the reading mentions that this method can help research projects by making data available easily. The lecturer disproves this theory, and explains that access to medical information is under strict rules of the governments and, and patients can choose whether thier data be available only for treatments purposes or both medical aqnd research purposes.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...aper and pens to record primitive data. Hence unreadable handwriting, or bad interpre...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
... to computer is still prone to errors. Finally the last paragraph of the reading menti...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, regarding, so, still, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44014084507 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94957582041 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595070422535 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6167352972 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348458679921 0.272083759551 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104344765777 0.0996497079465 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672728525057 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184119916336 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110516573987 0.0443174109184 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.2367328918 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.42419426049 119% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 63.6247240618 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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