TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa
Both the reading passage and the listening lecture give some information about the usage of electronic record systems in medicine. What is written in the text is either refuted or challenged by the lecturer.
First of all, the reading claims that electronic saves can reduce the money spend on patient records, and these records should be in an electronic system which doctor can easily reach, yet the professor refutes this point by saying that the electronic records are uncertain. keeping records on papers helps people to get access to easily when an urgent situation occurs. Furthermore, medical still have to pay more to electronic more than keeping records on papers.
Secondly, the author posits records, stored electronically, decreases human errors. However, this argument rebutted by the lecturer. She elaborates on this by mentioning these errors can not be eliminated. doctors write things about patients on the paper in the first place. After that, they enter this to the electrical platform. During this stage, the poor handwriting errors can not be avoided.
Finally, the article puts forward electronic medical records can have a large amount of information about patients. they can be reachable whenever needed, but the professor opposes this point by explaining that all this information creates privacy loss. Many patients wish to have a permission to keep their records. Therefore, there is a procedure to get permission from patient who may wants to block to use his own personal data.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Keeping
...t the electronic records are uncertain. keeping records on papers helps people to get a...
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Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Doctors
...ing these errors can not be eliminated. doctors write things about patients on the pape...
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Line 13, column 117, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...e amount of information about patients. they can be reachable whenever needed, but t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, first of all, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 241.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31950207469 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6703815885 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614107883817 0.540411800872 114% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.5732105524 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4666666667 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0666666667 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46503864106 0.272083759551 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125628483335 0.0996497079465 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110029050683 0.0662205650399 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252103386572 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123775345332 0.0443174109184 279% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.