TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading and the listening discuss the topic of sending humans to Mars. However, the professor discords with the article for several reasons.

First, while the reading claims that the trip would cost 2 years to go to the Mars, so the astronauts should bring a lot of food, water and oxygen, which needs a lot of space to store, the lecturer argues that there is a technology that can grow the plants and crops in the space. In addition, it can also recycle the water that used for plant the plants and turn the CO2 that release from the plants to the oxygen. Moreover, it did not waste a lot of space.

Second, the article indicates that the zero gravity on the space would hurt the astronauts' body. However, the professor claims that there are numbers of people who stay in the space station for months and they are safe through exercising regularly and taking the vitamin pills. Thus, it is not a big problem.

Third, the writer says that the radiation in the space would hurt the astronauts. In order to solve this problem, the spaceship should install a shield which is too heavy for the ship. Nevertheless, the lecturer claims that the radiation is not dangerous all time. As a result, the spaceship should only have a small shield for the astronauts to hide in. The astronauts should hide into the shield until the radiation passes only when the sensor detects the radiation.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, third, thus, while, in addition, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1154.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 247.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67206477733 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31389180763 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518218623482 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2110361411 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7692307692 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 63.6247240618 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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