TPO 51- Humans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia. Their large ears, long trunk, and long life span have made elephants one o

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TPO 51- Humans have long been fascinated by elephants, the largest land animal in the modern world. Social animals that live in herds, elephants are native to both Africa and Asia. Their large ears, long trunk, and long life span have made elephants one of the most captivating creatures on Earth. Our long-standing interest in elephants has led to several beliefs about surprising elephant behaviors.

The reading and lecture are both about humans interest in elephants which brought about by several beliefs and elephant behaviors. The author of the reading believes that elephants are the most interesting animal on earth. However, the lecturer casts doubts about the claims made in the article and refutes all the theories presented.

First of all, the author points out that elephants can sense that they are nearing death. It is mentioned that when they are senile and old elephants break off from their herds and go alone to bodies of water and die there. Conversely, the point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that people must not assume old elephants know they will die soon because they move away from their herds because their teeth move downward due to aging and have difficulty of chewing food. Moreover, she argues that the elephants wander around to look for soft vegetation which is usually near bodies of water and old elephants die there.

Secondly, the author contends that elephants have artistic capabilities. The article notes that elephants are taught to hold paintbrush and draw animals and flowers. On the contrary, the lecturer rebuts this argument. She suggests that the trainer taught the elephants to paint and they stroke the ear of the elephant which is sensitive part of the animal and can easily do the tricks they are taught to do. Furthermore, the elephant can remember certain pattern and they can repeat drawing it when their ears are touched by their trainers. In addition, the elephants are not aware that the lines they drew represents flowers or animals.

Finally, the author states that elephants are afraid of mice. The article establishes that herd of elephants are confronted by several mice and the elephants immediately back away and avoid them. The lecturer, on the other hand posits that elephants only reacts to things they are unfamiliar with and it is their natural instinct. She puts forth the idea if they are familiar with mice like for example in a zoo where they are constantly in contact with, they don't react and the elephants realize that the mice don't pose threat on them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...presents flowers or animals. Finally, the author states that elephants are afr...
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...ey are constantly in contact with, they dont react and the elephants realize that th...
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...and the elephants realize that the mice dont pose threat on them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 7.30242825607 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 22.412803532 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1373.03311258 130% => OK
No of words: 361.0 270.72406181 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38202987888 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506925207756 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8439381671 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2222222222 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06452816374 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177191787845 0.272083759551 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06699167301 0.0996497079465 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376043064019 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117191398692 0.162205337803 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270450972813 0.0443174109184 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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