TPO 52-integrated writing task
The author states a few reasons of why would be the best to send people to an asteroid. As opposed to, the lecturer who counter-argues that viewpoint trying to prove that these reasons do not seem convincing.
First and foremost the writer mentions that since the asteroids are smaller than planets, they have low gravity, so this makes the landing safer. Also, it will allow a spacecraft to carry much more equipment needed to set up the colony. On the contrary, the professor cannot disagree more, reasoning that it is true that the low gravity makes the landing easier, but it also, cause health problems for the people who are there. Some of the problems are loses of muscle mass, and bone density. Because of that people would suffer health issues.
The second argument the author gives is that the asteroids are rich in valuable elements such as gold and platinum. So, people could bring these metals on Earth. As a result, the metals could be sold and they can profit from it. However, the lecturer cannot be more outraged, explaining that the cost of these metals and the transportation would cost more than they think because it may happened that the price of these metals would not be the same as the real value is. The market would decide what are the values of these metals. Which, nobody could predict.
Lastly, on one hand, the reading passage points out that asteroids are easy to reach, some of them come too close to Earth. So, would be much more affordable to get to and get back again. Nevertheless, the professor declare that it is true that it is easy to reach an asteroid, but to return back to Earth could take even longer because the orbital pathways that the spacecraft would follow is very challenging. That's why, it is not secure to take the risk.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... problems for the people who are there. Some of the problems are lost of muscle mass, and b...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cle mass, and bone density get reduced. Because of that people would suffer health issu...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 483, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...ot be the same. The market would decide whats the value of the metals. Which, nobody ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d decide whats the value of the metals. Which, nobody could predict. Lastly, on ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 543, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he metals. Which, nobody could predict. Lastly, on one hand, the reading passage...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 286, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...it is easy to reach an asteroid, but to return back to Earth could take even longer because...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 413, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...craft would follow is very challenging. Thats why, it is not secure to take the risk....
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, lastly, may, nevertheless, second, so, such as, as a result, it is true, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 313.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67731629393 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32516753517 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5303514377 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.2315846727 49.2860985944 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1176470588 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 7.06452816374 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 53.8541721854 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.0289183223 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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